Have you ever been scared of something that haunts you everyday of your life? Well I do. My biggest fear are my nightmares. I was running toward my house trying to get away from what ever was chaseing me. I ran in my house no one was there so I ran in my room and hide behind the door and it had me cornered in fear but when I looked to see what had me cornered there was no on or nothing there. I woke crying. I couldn't get back to sleep.
The next night I told myself I wasn't going to have that nightmare again. When I went to sleep I Had another nightmare. I was sleep in my bed and someone came through my window and had a butcher knife and tried to kill me. I awoke crying again and quickly cut on the light. I looked around my room and told myself its just a dream. So I went Back to sleep. I dreamed something horrible I rode my bike from school when I stopped and saw someone unloading something. I took a closer look and saw it was my granddaddys head. I woke again crying.
The next night I told myself I am not going to have another nightmare. I was wrong but this time I wasn't going to let it get to me. I was at school and someone entered the school and shot my crush before my eyes. I rushed to my crushes side and gave him c-pr. When he got up I was relieved . I gave hime a hug and cried tears of joy. I may be still be scared of my nightmares but they dont wake me up crying anymore.
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this was written by me for school and i really do have nightmares like thid
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this was good, but it did have some mistakes... the wording was off a little, some things didn't make sense together. I wish it was a little more detailed and it had more imedry. Over all it was good.
beginning: 2, language: 1, plot: 2, ending: 2, dialog: 2, characters: 2.
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Sorry
Sorry that you have nightmares like these, but I am glad that you are dealing with them. This is an interesting account of your nightmares. You have some typos which you will probably be able to proof.
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It's was fair for a first attempt, but it seems a bit unrealistic. If someone shot him, giving him CPR wouldn't revive him. Plus, what was the shooters motivation. Details are very important! I know that you wanna skimp over the details and get straight to the end, but otherwise, your readers will not be satisfied.
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the teacher said it had to short and shraight to the point
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