Short Story Homework Dialogue

Miriam walked into the kitchen and looked at Herb. He was trying to make a salad for their dinner and she thought he was having some trouble with the celery.1

"What is wrong, Herb?" she asked, as he banged the knife down on the counter.2

"I can't get the darn strings out!" he exclaimed impatiently.3

Miriam chuckled, "Well, just leave the celery out of the salad, then."4

"I never thought of that." Herb tossed the celery back into the refrigerator and continued making the salad. 5

"Now see here, Herb, you are making me very nervous," Miriam said, as Herb began to cut the lettuce with a butcher knife, "that is not the correct knife for that job."6

"Well, you do not have to watch," he replied, brandishing the knife threateningly at the lettuce.7

"Herb, what did that poor head of lettuce ever do to you?" Miriam walked over and stood near the counter looking at the lettuce in mock sympathy.8

"I am not sure, but I thought it moved. Did you see it move?" Herb asked, looking at Miriam with wide eyes, pretending to be terrified.9

"Oh, Herb!" Miriam laughed and hugged him from behind, "Put that knife down and come into the living room. I will give you a back rub and then you can relax while I make dinner."10

"But, but--," Herb began, then stopped and laughed with her, "Oh, all right, you win. I am no good in the kitchen, and I never have been."11

"You got that right," Miriam chuckled. She hugged him again and then she led him to the living room. 12

After she had made him comfortable, she went back to the kitchen and cleaned up. Then she proceeded to make a delicious dinner.13

Author notes

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  • DragonessTawnya
    July 19, 2004
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    Blargh, I hate writing dialogue. I am no good at it.

  • Northern Redneck
    July 16, 2004
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    Ha Ha, you had to write dialogue. I hate writing dialogue.

  • DragonessTawnya
    July 14, 2004
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    Thank you. I think you're right. I usually write that way, because I usually speak that way. For instance, I almost put "you are right" instead of "you're right." Maybe I am just too formal for my own good. Thank you again for your comment.
    ~Tawnya~


  • kirbysman
    July 14, 2004
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    Good job with the dialogue. Since there are no comments to help understand here, I will only say that, since this appears to be husband and wife in casual conversation, it seemss that they would not say, "What is wrong, Herb?" but rather, "What's wrong, Herb." It seems that the shorted form would be more appropriate in several places. Just my thought. Paul