Chapter One: Chase
"Get down here now!" I heard my mother scream. What a way to wake up on the last day of school. Of course, perfect Jenna was already on her way downstairs, leaving me to take the heat for being the last one up on a Friday.
"I don't hear you moving up there," my mother shouted up the stairs again, at least trying to be nice this time.
"Coming, mother," is what I tried to say in a voice that meant that I'm not going to move until I absolutely have to. All that came out was "ahhmah..." This is a typical morning at my house. Mom yelling, dad on his way out the door saying his rushed good bye, Jenna awake and ready, then me stuck living life in the super- slow lane. I should probably mention that my name is Chase. I'm 16, tall for my age, green eyes, and whatever color hair I have time for this week. I'm a straight D student and my social life definitely takes priority. Stereotypical, you might say, and you would be right.
"Damn it, Chase, you're going to miss the bus!" Thats how I know it's time to start moving. I get out of bed, pink hair a mess and throw on yesterdays pants and my ever famous white T- shirt.
"Quit your god damn bitching, mother, I'm coming!!" I shout at her.
"Fuck you, get out of my god damn house you lazy, good- for- nothing son of a bitch!" Without eating breakfast, without taking a shower or brushing my precious hair as my mother calls it, I raun down my driveway to the bus. Just one more day in hell, I think to myself.
Author notes
This is the first chapter. Tell me what you think, and if you actually like it I'll keep going.
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I loves it
=]] Twas good. Made me laugh. Mostly because the mother calls herself a bitch...Hehe. I'm a loser. But still, twas funnny. Grats. =]]
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I love it!
I really like this piece. I really got into it. I love your writing though, It's really brilliant. watch the cursing. the language that the mom uses in her last bit of dialog is kinda strong, maybe you should tone that down a little (just a little though, maybe take out the f-word)?
Great job!!!keep up the great writing.
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Okay.... I'm shring this with mom.
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good start and good story. keep writing and good job.
♠Punk
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Well, I actually like it so you should continue. I wish it was longer though. It sounds really good and I can't wait to read more.
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Everyone in this family is so friendly... This was a good start, but I wish it was a little longer.
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