Buy Myself

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By myself
I buy myself2

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Purchase a head
with eyes
and brain
and headaches, too
(I like the pain
it’s one thing I can truly own
one thing I can bear alone)

A body, too
those extra pounds
fatty mounds sag
to the ground
the stretchy tits
the damaged knees
the thighs made up
of cottage cheese

These I buy, despite the cost
I take the gains
ignore the loss
forget the pain
I like the way
I finally have the right to say:

You have no control of me
I am private property
Feel free to stand beside the gate
For I’m content to let you wait
away from me
all day and night
Trespassers are shot on sight4

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Author notes

*~*For Contest - I think this poem is the best because I wrote it with absolute honesty and it has a message that, I think, went across very well: Just because your body isn't perfect doesn't make you a lesser person, unworthy of someone who loves you for who you are. Your body is yours . All those perceived "flaws" are the things that make you different from other people, the things that make you a unique individual. Don't spend your time wishing that you looked better or that you had different genes (like I did, a LOT, when I was in high school). Love yourself for who you are and never let ANYONE tell you that you shouldn't.

Um, that is why I think this poem should win your contest. Hopefully my message went through and, if it places, then maybe more people will read it and maybe be affected by it in some small way.*~*


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  • Mnemosnye
    October 15, 2007
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    very nice.

    I loved the flow and rhyme scheme.

  • Scorpious
    August 15, 2007
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    well done!

    very self-glorifying. nice.


  • asthray.heart
    August 15, 2007

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    This is forking awesome Totally bubbly.

    I got the message this puts across, and alot of people should reallly look into it and see the true meaning.

    A beautifully done poem, the ending boxes very well done and truthful, full of womanly goods.

    It puts a bizzare image of an old woman, wrinkly and fat and still living life to the fullest and flanting a totally bogus body. But still everyone loves her, and tries to get a touch with her.

    Tnks for entering and goodluck,

    ~Lady Madeline.


  • heartfullofvenom
    August 14, 2007

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    Loved it.

    This was a very powerful poem, and it did affect me in a way. it flowed and it made perfect sense.

    GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST!

    ♥♥♥


  • Veritaserum
    June 22, 2007
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    I like this!

    This is a cool poem! Very original idea... and it reads well too.

    Good job! :0)


  • Embitter
    June 13, 2007

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    I know your formatting pain!

    But this was a lovely piece.. It made me giggle, but it also was quite motivational. Awesome work, my friend. Good luck in the contest


  • Bitter Irony
    June 13, 2007

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    Before I forget--amazing ending!

    Too bad the formatting didn't go quite as planned (that is, I don't see any fancy indentations), because I have the feeling that might have added something to this poem.

    Still, it's excellent work: a very original idea with great "imagery" (I'm not sure it can be called that when refering to emotions, but it was worth a try). I'd certainly pay money to publish this--too bad I don't own an e-zine, huh? :-)

    I do suggest you edit for punctuation, though: add some periods to the ends of sentences, and use commas to separate ideas. Only capitalize the start of sentences, not tthe start of every line.

    Good luck in the contest, and thanks a lot for entering! I really enjoyed reading this poem!

    beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 4, ending: 3, dialog: 4, characters: 4.

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