The Latest Crave - Chapter 1

The boy awoke with suddently, a tight grasp over his throat. Or so it seemed. There was no visible hand on his throat. Just the hand of Thirst. Why was it so demanding right now? Why did he need to quench his thirst so badly? As a groan emitted from his throat, he arose from the bed and fell onto the bed, twisting and twitching in agony. He needed to taste that liquid heroine as it seeped down his throat, feel it dance through his veins and calm the thrist. After he pulled himself up onto his feet with the help of his desk, leaning against it long enough to catch his breath, the thrist eased a little. He thought maybe a walk around his neighborhood would help. He walked over slowly and pulled on some jeans, buttoning and zipping them slowly. He reached into his closet and grabbed a random shirt, slipping it on. His eyes wandered over to the clock. 3:23 AM. Holy Shit. Tomorrow was going to be brutal for him. He sprayed on some deordant, it leaving a tingling feeling on his skin. Soon, out the window he went, just a few seconds after slipping on shoes and grabbing his cell phone. Out into the cold, brisk night air.1

After walking for a bit, Nathaniel began to feel the thirst ease slowly. Jeesh, it only took five laps around his entire neighborhood. He let a smile appear across his face, only to suddently be replaced with on of wonder, as he heard footsteps around him. Standing under the light of a streetlight, Nathaniel awaited this stranger to appear under the light. As the footsteps got louder, the shadow in the distance grew. After slipping his hood on over his head, he leaned against the pole softly. Soon, that same shadow that had been in the distance melted away under the light, revealing a stunningly beautiful girl where it once was. Nathaniel quickly ran his eyes down her, and as he did, that tight feeling around his throat began to reappear. Shaking his head, his dark hair softly floating in the breeze under his hood, he wondered to himself, why did the Thrist flare up like it had just now? Did it have anything to do with this gorgeous being in front of him? He was soon to find out as she approached closer and closer to him.

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  • love tank x
    July 3, 2007
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    Wow; very interesting. You caught my attention! :]] Great job<3


  • LadyLionnir
    June 13, 2007

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    I really think you put a great amount of amazing quality into this, the descriptions seem to set me in the scene. Danyul was also were vivid in my mind and the way he felt! I can't wait for more!!!!!

  • Word
    June 12, 2007
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    Interesting.....

    You've definitely caught my interest. Your descriptions are phenomenal, I can taste feel the hunger you so eloquently put into words. One suggestion, you should shorten the paragraphs and I can't wait to see dialogue.
    Thanks for the read,
    Cant wait for more
    peace