She Got Her Wish

The old woman turned one-hundred-and-three

Her hair all white

Her mind still right

She got her wish.

The old woman is no more

Her hands are cold

Her love we hold

She got her wish.

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  • xhappyxrainbowsx
    June 19, 2007

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    It took me a minute to get this, and when I did I went OOOH. Lol. I'm an idiot.

    Me like


  • Bitter Irony
    June 15, 2007
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    Sorry, the line limit was seven, this poem has eight. Thanks for entering anyway!

  • detty
    June 14, 2007

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    That was sad in a way, but it's good that she got her wish in the end. (: "Her mind still right" sounded just a little out of place, but otherwise, great poem! I think you write great poetry. (:


  • Taboo Pixie
    June 11, 2007
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    wow..do all old people wish to die..its an okay poem..i like the way it rhymes


  • asthray.heart
    June 11, 2007

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    Wow old lady....lucky she got to die huh? This was very sweet and memorable for her...

    Thank you for entering and good luck

    Lady Madeline


  • k8fairy
    June 11, 2007

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    Oh that is so sweet and so simple! And so good. That is no good, cause I am in that competition too. :-p I really like your simple rhyme, I think it makes it very just . . . well I don't know to explain it, but it fits really perfectly to me.

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