"What have I done to you?" she wept. The fear was apparent in her face.1
"Simple," I laughed. "You exist. You're filth, meant to die. You live on the street; you eat garbage and you end up freezing to death in the winter. You're an embarrassment to our community. No one cares about the likes of you."2
Her defiant glare told me otherwise.3
"It wasn't my fault...He slipped off..." the woman wailed.4
" We're only here to help."5
She started shaking her bonds and kicking.6
"You're not helping!" she screamed. "I'm innocent! I swear that I didn't kill him!" Her wails cut off anything I planned to say. "I want to go home! Somebody, HELP!"7
"You better start praying," I simpered, "because murderers don't get to go home for the holidays. You'll be gone and in hell in a moment."8
"NO! I'M INNOCENT! I SWEAR I DIDN'T KILL HIM!"9
I grinned as I wrapped the electric wires around her. To me, all of this was a game. A person like this woman was a waste--a waste of oxygen and food. 10
The screams as people died were beautiful; the smell of their death would hang in the air and for just a moment there would be hell in the air. For that small amount of time I would be God, the holy man with the power to end a person's life. I was important.11
I would become the most powerful person in the world, an Adolf Hitler that didn't lose to Russia, the King Tut that wasn't murdered.12
I pulled the switch and she died.13
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"Emma, Jason! I'm back from work! 15
My kids ran down the stairs to greet me. "Daddy!" Emma screamed. "You're home!!!!!!"16
I laughed and picked my little girl up. My son was too old and cool to be picked up and hugged so Jason stood there and smiled.17
"Hey Dad," Jason said. "Anything interesting happen at work today?" 18
"Not really," I answered. "Just check-ups on the people. One poor woman was electrocuted today, but she's with the Lord now. She talked to the priest before the other warden arrived."19
We all walked into the kitchen where my wife was making dinner. Everything was perfect for me. I loved my family more than anything. They were my life. I knew I could thank God for my job at the prison, for my family, and for my friends.20
"Hey Dad, can I go to the Motor Cross race on Sunday?!??!" my son yelled. "Nick wants me to go!"21
"Of course not," I snapped. "We have church. Which is more important? Church or a race?"22
"Church..." Jason replied sadly. I turned back around to talk to my wife and I could see the look of hate on his face from the corner of my eye.23
"My daddy's a murderer..." I heard Jason whisper.24
I'd have to watch out for him. Nothing comes in between me and my perfect family.25
Author notes
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Topaz135
I really butchered this guy's story...
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butchered? not at all. Proud to be associated with it
Thanks for letting me know and for the by line. Bronze eh? good result! -
great
Great story, very creepy and yet interesting. I really liked it. ^^ -
WOAH! this is great I wish there was more. Great ending line. Very intriguing.
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I loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The ending was really really really suprising! I thought it would be another nicve-gus-whosa-killer story but it isn't!
Well, actually it is. he killed the prisoner, but he diudn't kill the kjid. if it was my story the dad would kill the little boy. but thats just me and a lot of people don't like violence.
well, good luck in the contest and i hope you get a gold medal cause you really deserve one
LLLLLOOOOOOOVVVVVVVVEEEEEEE YYYYYYYYAAAAAA,
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This is great! The ending was beautifully written. It sends chills down your spine. Oooh. I loved it!!!!!!!! Keep up the great work!
God bless you,
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Crosseyed387 ~~~~~
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Arianna, formerly
Aristide, formerly
Aristotle.
(Arianna Jennifer Aristide)
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Are you seriously ten years old. If so, I'm about to cry because this is pretty much better than what I can do! lol. Not fair.
No seriously, you impress me. Form the begginning until the end, it was fantastic. Though the center alignment was a little funky looking.
Nice job,
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It's always interesting to think that the most antagonistic figures in our society also have a home to go to, also have a family who loves him or her very much.
This was quite well done.
good luck.
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Creepy. But tasteful. Like a fine tasting wine. Very good. I definitely wanted to read more. A tad on the sick and twisted side...but we all like a little violence
Great write. Keep up the good work
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all other writers beware!!
Pood stuff. Kept me on the edge of my seat!!
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You concluded it well, gave it that lil touch of insanity i felt it needed the whole way through. Way to end it, very well done.
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one word. weirfd. I liked it but it was odd.
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very nice
"I'd have to watch out for him. Nothing comes inbetween me and my perfect family."Nice concluding line to your fine episode. I felt as if i was reading a novel! the flow of words is natural. Own family is dear to evryone. This is hypocracy some poeple have in matters of love !Nice write dear Aristide!
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Great write
THis was excellent, what awesome chilling contrast, WOW, it gave me the shivers and can I just way WOW?? -
oooo... Nice. I really liked this. It was good. Awesome write.
Oleander Dragon
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Chilling - but nicely done - thank you
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