It was Friday. 24 hours til Girls Night out and Diana was bursting with excitement. She thought about Jimmy and the best way to make a good first impression on him if she were to meet him. Maybe after No Man's Land had finished their set she'd work up enough nerve to go up and talk to him. With each thought of Girls night out she grew more anxious for the weekend. Friday was the day in English where the whole period was devoted to Creative Writing. Dianna pulled out her Creative writing notebook and spent 10 mintues writing nature haikus. After those 10 minutes she flipped to the section marked Private and wrote yet anoter poem about how she felt about Jimmy. 1
The poem is as follows2
So powerful you look3
struming on your 4
red electric gutiar5
you are my shining star6
and I admire your prowess7
She closed her creative writing notebook and looked at the clock 'Msybe I work on my precalc homework a little bit so i don't have so much to do over the weekend, yup sound like a good plan.' She pulled out her precalc binder and her calculator and began to immerse herself in my magical world of precalc equations. U.S. History and Biology seemed to drag on for ever and ever. Then finally the final bell rang and school was out for the weekend. Dianna joined the flow of her fellow classmates as they headed toward the busses. Dianna climbed aboard her bus, grabbed her regular seat and closed her eyes. Her overbearing excitement for tomorrow night's events combined with all the stresses of the past week combined to make her exhausted she closed her eyes and fell asleep. When she woke up the bus had pulled up to her stop. She gathered her stuff and got off and walked the sgort distance from her house. As soon as she opened the door to her house and greeted her mom who was sitting at the kitchen table reading the newspaper and then she headed to her room to start her homework. She put the radio on low and pulled out her biology binder. After being totally engrossed in creatures that inhabit the intertidal zone for about 10 minutes her focus directed immediaaatey to Jimmmy 'Gosh, i sure hope he notices me.' 8
She went to bed that night happy and looking more foward to girls night out than ever.9
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Comments
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Another good chapter. Not the best so far, but no bad at all. You have written enough to keep me interestested and therefore making me want to continue reading...
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This chapter didn't read as smooth as the others, but it is still good. A little tweaking could make it better, but that's the choice of the author and just my opinion. The one line,"The poem is as follows" seems to be in the way. I don't think you need it because of the previous line. Still, just my opinion. If you do tweak this chapter, check the spelling typos as well.
I am off to the next chapter...I think I am hooked.
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