Lucy,
I'm just a whisper of a person
floating outside my empty shell.
I know this is taboo,
but you must keep a foot
on my fleeting senses,
while we dance in the Sky with Diamonds.
Author notes
Option 2: Used lyrics from the Beatles song - Lucy in the Sky with Diamonds
This is my own adaption of the lyrics and a poem about LSD the drug, not based on the Beatles point of view of what the lyrics meant to them.
A contest entry
- Interesting Options by FRIENDSfanatic.
175 points, ended June 24, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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LSD?
I think this would be better suited for Cocaine not LSD because acid is a liquid not a diamond type shape. But it was still a nice poetic piece so lol good work!
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This is a play on the song Lucy in the Sky with Diamonds. Not the shape of the drug, the imagery
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I LOVE IT!
that is wonderful, thank you for choosing that option, and very nice work. I love that song -
I believe the comma at the end of the second last line should be a period. Otherwise it flows well and you've an amazing way of grasping onto your readers. Good luck in the contest.
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Nice allusion!
Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck! -
It reminds me of the Beatles song Lucy in the Sky with diamonds ^_^ (nice song!)
I love the whisper of a person line, perhaps it's true, some people drown themselves in their poisons of choice (drugs, booze, sex or what) because they live in empty shells ^_^
This is short, but it doesn't leave the reader feeling empty, rather, it makes us ponder certain things..
thanks for this!
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Yes, I played with their lyric in my own twisted way, cause I am cool like that
Maybe I'll pay the beatles some tribute in my author's note, but meh. Too much work, everybody knows the song anyway
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*Is a sucker for LSD referances*
Veru nice indeed, stand alonewith its nice surface meaning and drug referance without any awkward metaphors to convey it.. good luck in the contest! -
Very nicely written. Powerful words even though its so short. Very well done
Keep up the great work
Em
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