Hours and hours it has been
My hands on your supple skin
Your eyes facing mine
Sparkling so bright and fine
Just like the moonlight
You lightened up the night
And your soft lips
I wish I could drink
From them sips
Those words that they played
Along your hair that swayed
Made me go insane
A kiss is what I want to obtain
And your cheeks so warm
On which my fingers swarm
Finding for me lips a dorm
A place warm to stay
Sleep and dream all day
Your lips like a cave
And words inside engraved
Graciously you uttered them away
Each with a glimpse of magic
To them my heart became enslaved
Words like spells
Ringing like bells
My ears tried to keep the sound
Before they are lost to never be found
The moon crept away
Behind the clouds to stay
But you kept glowing bright
Giving luminance and light
My lips took a form
I felt the softness
Without having them as a dorm
The supple sweetness
Made me weak
A kiss is what I started to seek
To pick one from your face
Will surely mine wanted to embrace
But long before the moon returned
My lips had a hug
I rested my weakened cracked lips
My dried arid deserted lips
Found the home
Each to each beside yours
Author notes
option 3
A contest entry
- Options Inside by Taylor Renee.
500 points, ended September 16, 2007, 59 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very nice poem, very origional. I liked it. I think the ryming was a little stressed, and they werwe hard words to rhyme, but overall it was a very nice poem. I liked it a lot.
thnks for entering, beautiful poem!
xoxo
taylor
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beautiful.. very, very well written! this had a nice flow to it.
thanks for entering and good luck! -
good poem , different style from most , very individual, and full of hope , give us more of that
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Sweet poem
I liked the build up to finally the kiss. It makes me think of some first kisses I've had. -
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thanks for da comment
i think it was made for first kiss poem
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I really like how they are divided up like that too. You have a very fluent vocabulary as well. Really sweet poem, good job!
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wow...this left me breathless. i'm a sucker for an amazing love poem and this definitely falls into that catagory.
your vocabulary that you displayed here was one of my favorite parts of this piece. the words were gorgeous but didn't over-take the meaning of the poem if you get what i'm saying.
this is great and i'm SO glad that you wrote it. for a moment, you captured my heart!
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lol...i think this was beautiful. i personally loved it. romantic and mesmerising, you must definately not have any trouble with the ladies
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wow, this was hot. i found one mistake: you said "you cheek" instead of "your cheek".
~belowit
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thankssss for da comment and thanks for the mistake i appreciate it loads thankies
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