You stabbed me in the heart once,
took out the knife,
wiped the love off the silver blade
and stabbed my heart again.
Author notes
Again, how I feel.
In a list
A contest entry
- Short Poetry by Bitter Irony.
165 points, ended June 15, 2007, 26 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
sigh.."tell me what you think". i guess. if you must.
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Mmmm....I don't like it at all....Nope. Not at all. Hated how it was so powerful and emotional and totally, totally perfect. Yup. Totally hated it.
Omg. I can't even write that with a straight face!
I'm TOTALLY KIDDING. I loved it. Love everything about it. And it's so simple...and yet so awesome!
Ramblings: I had this thought today during lunch. Me and my friends were talking about Brittany's (my BFF) story that I was going to help her with...anyway, what my thought was--is that it's amazing how when someone smiles, you're entire day can be brightened. You know?
And then I was thinking about my ex-crushes (ew, now that I think about it) and how it's true. When they smile, everything seems okay.
ACK.
I gotta go for supper!
ttyl,
ily,
e♥
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(: Awwww thaannkkss.
For a moment I thought you were serious about hating. I was like, "Hmm. Crap."
Well I'm glad you do like it!!!
Thanks for reading
(And there's a smile for you!! And yes, the smile thing was totall true.)
♥sarahhhh! -
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HOW COULD I HATE ANYTHING YOU WRITE? You're so freakin' talented, I mean...really, it's like impossible to hate anything you write!
Smile back at you!
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Awww, thanks, and back to you!
♥sarahelizabeth!
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Ouch...
You are a very talented writer for someone your age. I like your writing syle. Good job and keep on writing!
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There's no way I could stop.
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.. Ouch. the idea of falling out of love and getting hurt again is pretty painful. I like it though.. Interesting idea.
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Thnx (:
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Oh my, this was...packed with emotion.
I've felt like this before...it's a horrible feeling.
I hope you are better!
Very good.
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Thanks! I'm very much better.
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I can see it, but, i feel you could have packed even more emotion into it. though it's still very good.
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I'm working on a rewrite of it...I'll post it soon- thanks for the critique and comment and for reading it =]
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that was very powerful man. So many of us have had that exact feeling the world, so if you feel this way right now, it will pass in time, as hard as that may seem.
For four lines, you really got your message across well. -
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Thanks so much- and your right, the feeling did pass.
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Very sad, is this really how you feel? Nicely written i loved the over all flow of it. Very sad though
hope your okay
Keep up the great work
Em
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Yeah-- thanks for the comment!
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I like this poem a lot. My only complaint is in the first line: "You stabbed in the heart once" should "me" be behind the word "stabbed"?
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Heheh! There I fixed it for you- feel special, oh so special
Thanks for pointing that out.
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Haha thanks- Sorry, I'll fix that now. Like I said...bad day for me.
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