I am in a haze, my feelings for you
Drifting overhead, like a balloon
Escaped from that child’s fingers
Rising upwards, not very fast
But fast enough so I can’t grab onto them
Again.
Author notes
Uhh well this was for a contest, and its how I feel right now...so yeah. I dunno I'm kinda tired so its probably all whacked up.
In a list
A contest entry
- Short Poetry by Bitter Irony.
165 points, ended June 15, 2007, 26 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Uhh.....ummm....well usually this is where I say something funny. But since I can't think of anything, I'll just say "Tell me what ya think"
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I love the imagery you used. It makes any piece of writing even better! Nice work! (once again)
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Thank ya's
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Ooh. neat. Interesting imagery.. love does make ya feel all floaty and stuff. The imagery was really neat.
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Thanks (:
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Actually, it's not whacked up!
I found it quite interesting and meaningful! ^_^
Good work!
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Thank you for reading and commenting- glad you enjoyed it.
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No problem
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It's not all whacked up!
I liked it, a lot actually.
It's short, and said something.
you did well!
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Thanks =] I'm trying to find a title for it...
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Some very nice words in this short poem. These pomes are really powerful with the meaning that that hold within.
Hope your okay and not feeling too done
Keep up the great work
Em
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Thanks! I'm feeling better, now.
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lol..its nice and yes it is a very creative simile/metaphor.good job. thanks for sharing
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Heh heh- creative is my middle name =]
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Very interesting and appropriate metaphor!
Good luck in the contest, and thanks for entering!beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 2, characters: 2.
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Thanks!
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