Summer has come and passed
Autumn came left trees undressed
Winter in snow and cold
My life I can no longer hold
Soon it will frostiness will go bleak
And my soul with fade so weak
All had come and passed
But you didnt come to visit yet
Night approached
My fear exploded
Howls echoing in the wilderness
Clouds in dark dresses avenging fast
The sky filled with rains
Crying bitter blood
It got even cold
The wind blew trembling the tress
Filling the field with mist
And trees dropped their leaves
Where are thee my love
Where are you my life?
Wherever you go wherever you are
Remember my only request
At least to visit me once a year
Come near me
So I could smell your lovely scent
Let me hear your voice
And kill my lust
Let me sing you a song
In hopeless hopes to tell you my pains
Let your clad touch my grave
So my tomb will ever be green
And end ever blessed ever happy
Leave a rose on my crypt
So my soul will be ever happy in heaven
My grave is blank without you
The land so dry that cactus grows
Spikes and thorns pierce through the land
Biting and stabbing my dead heart
Author notes
option 2
A contest entry
- Come in and see... by Kevan.
135 points, ended June 15, 2007, 13 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - I'm a tough girl by MyaXhiroshi.
115 points, ended August 2, 2007, 13 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love it. I love the imagery you put into this poem. Great job ans keep on writing!
*Frozen Angel* -
Beautifully written but it confused me at some parts, though I really like it. Nice work! But...why did you have to die? It would've been better if you stayed alive and waited forever [I honestly have no clue what I'm talking about >_<]
But anyway, awesome descriptions! I loved it!
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Very nice flow. Very nice descriptions. Very nice emotion. Very nice everything. Seriously, this is amazing. So in depth and emotional and descriptive and just.... WOW.
Good luck in the contest and thank you so very much for the entry!
~Kevan!~
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So Sad
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Wow this was deep. Your not dead so please don't want to be...stay positive and go on, fight with all that you have.
Nice poem, loved the flow and as usual wonderful descriptions.
Keep up the great work
Em
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babe I really think you need to stop writing about you being dead, is very sad I hope you are okay this ws very deep.
Ebbz xox
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