Used to be full of such big hopes,
Thought I could climb the greatest mountain slopes,
Used to think I was capable of anything,
Thought I had already achieved many things,
I didn't think I was unbeatable,
Never thought I was invincible,
But I thought I was atleast Capable.
Then disappointment creeps inside
in a sickly form,
And then violently hits,
like a fearful storm.
Everything I thought I was,
I really I'm not.
After this I realize...
I really I'm lost.
This feeling is inexplicable,
This feeling is dreadful.
To have carried myself to the highest of heights,
And then to find myself falling, faster than the speed of light.
Told myself the sky is the limit,
Someday I would reach the skies,
But I never really got that high it was just an illusion,
and now I know where the truth lies.
Everything is now illuminated,
and ironically, I now see the darkness.
The light has finally showed me the dark dreaded truth.
I'm not good enough. Never was.
I lived in my own world, hidden from reality.
Thank you, oh thank you light,
for showing me what I truly am.Worthless. and I don't need your pity.
Author notes
um..having a dull day so...yea
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ofcourse not all poems have to rhyme at a steady pace, I understand that, I am not asking that you create a perfectly precise pattern, so I guess my comment wasn't clear, and I apologize. It was a very good poem, you did very well. I was only saying that as a reader, I found parts of it somewhat awkward to read, and i think just a tiny bit of editing here and there would make it a great poem
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Wow...I mean really, WOW.
It has so much emotion packed into it. It's just; indescribable. The rhyme scheme also adds to the flow, which is really good. It sends through a very good message, and tells about life. Very nice!
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Ouch, well, I hope you're feeling better! This poem was really meaningful, and I really really liked how you put in that little bit of irony, it just made the poem so much more impactful. Keep writing those poems, cause you're really good at them!
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This is a very powerful poem and I kind of know the feeling of thinking you're something but then ending up to find out that I was just worthless, this is a very good poem you did a great job
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thanks!
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Very good and strong, powerful words used here to give out a clear image if the pain and dissapointment in this peice.
You can feel the depth of let down the person feels and how they react. The wording flows well together and has great description.
Thanks for sharing this with everyone and awesome job.
Lady Madeline.
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This was really good. I liked the imagery, reminds me a lot of someone I know. Kinda odd.. umm... but good job on this, I like it.
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very nice so dark poetr i like your poem alots it expresses alots
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very nicely done. very poetic and dark. it is very well written. Note, your I's are not all caplized when they are alone. they need to be. it is proper english grammer. thanks for shareing your piece
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