I was picking roses in the garden and one pricked me! Ow! I heard an Icecream truck! "Mommy mommy I WANT ICECREAM!" I screamed when i was little.
I got a spongebob thingy and drank some fruit punch so when i bit into it, it looked like i was a vampire!"
"Look mommy!"
"Yes dear." She said while trimming flowers and fluffing up the garden.
Lets play pweety music!" I screamed. When i was little i said pweety not pretty.
"Okay sweetie." She got out the radio and we listened to pweety music. "This is fun." I got on the swing and i fell.
"WAH! WAH WAH WAH!" I screamed as i hurt my toe on the rocks.
"What happened?" My mom ran over to me as if she were as fast as lighting. She helped me up and kissed my toe.
"I'm okay now mommy." This was the best day i could ever dream off. That day was so fun I tell you.
Author notes
sorry that it was so short.
A contest entry
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350 points, ended June 8, 2007, 32 entries
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aw...its so sweet and innocent
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This was a good story even though it was short. I don't understand though why it was the best day you ever had other than it being fun.
beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 3, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Very Sweet
I love your story of your best day. It is so sweet and refreshing. Kisses from Mommys always cure even the worst owiees. I love that you used the language of your four year old self. It was such a nice touch to 'hear' your former baby talk. Dancing to 'pweety' music with my daughter is one of my favorite things to do too.
Having a lightning fast mom is a priceless treasure.
I hope that you have many more days as happy as this one.
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thanks! I know i trie hard to remember what happened. 'pweety' lol
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Ahh...good childhood memories..reminds me when I was in kindergarten. Good luck!
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kool it has a good voice
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