One week can change anyone's life. This is a story about love. 1
Monday:2
They slam into each other in the hallway; he picks up what she dropped and she picks up his guitar case. 3
In one fleeting moment in time,their eyes meet; dark, painful, hating, and wanting. He goes to reach for her hand, but she snatches away quickly, but smiles, leaving a smirk on his face.4
Tuesday-5
They start seeing each other more, she starts smiling alot more and talking to him. She's beginning to change, and he can tell. She still wouldn't let him touch her, though. 6
Wednesday-7
They started meeting in the park at midnight; he told her his secrets, she told him hers, and one of her biggest ones: she liked hurting herself,and showed him her scars. His eyes swelled with tears. She promised that she wouldn't do it anymore. She really thought her sincerity covered it. But he wasn't that easily fooled. 8
Thursday-9
She wasn't at school. All he could think about was where the she could be. He called and called, but no one answered, and her parents said she went to school that morning. She finally told him at the park that night, saying that she was sick and needed the day off. "Don't go to the park tomorrow night."10
Friday-11
11:30. He goes to her house... they say she went to the park. He races to the park. And there she is, dark droplets falling from infront of her. She turns around ,black tears are streaming from her eyes, and whispers, "I'm sorry". He catches her, and carries her to the hospital. When she wakes up, she smiles because her angel is by her side; his hand in hers.12
He lifts his head, and smiles saying, 13
" when you hurt, I hurt14
when you smile, I smile15
when you hate, I hate16
and when you fall, I will catch you."17
They were inseperable. And then, two months later, she died of a reason unknown. When asked about it later, he coldy replied, "I couldn't catch her."18
Author notes
This might sound crappy, but one week can change someone's life; Someone who never smiles, never sees the brighter side can become a beautiful person. This is a story about love, and the irony is that she wanted to love and be loved; but she still wanted to end it.
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hello all, Ive been gone for a long time, but i will return and write more, and i just thought this could use a change, a littel sophistication
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Dude Im a guy and this choked me up..Whats happening to me? lol, good poem though, very touchin and meaningful, i like poems like this, once again good job..You should enter more contests, you probably could win a lot i bet
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yeah, i was going to put that he killed himself in the ending... but i put it that way... so it would create a sense of questioning; did he kill himself, or did he live on??
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hmmm...alright, i do like the story, but the ending wasn't like the best it could have been, and i'm totally just being honest with you...cause it was almost ironic in a funny way when you said something like they were inseperable and then she overdosed, it's almost like you were contradicting yourself, because obviously they were seperable cause she killed herself and left him...you know...unless you were implying that by the end, when he said he hurt when she did, and stuff like that, and then the whole how she overdosed, maybe then you were implying that he too was going to kill himself to be with her...i dunno, it leaves the reader just sitting there thinking about the ending...but i still liked it, just a little contradictive in the ending.
Christina -
this is beautiful. great job
You should go into more depth and write a whole book about this!!! lol
~Laura
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Like everyone above i enjoyed this story a lot... I like the way you separated it into days like that and explained a little then moved on.. when i saw the title i didnt expect it to be like that... it was differnt. a good differnt though lol... well great write!
~andrea~ -
Um...the end was the best part, but I still thought the whole "they were inseperable. And then, she died" thing was a lil overdramatic. That's just me. That's probably what you were going for since it was how a week could change your life, hey? Well, good job anyway. Kudos!
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yea it was cute...in a short new way of writing it...well i suppose it's not really new, just it's like the first i've read like that, so ya know...but yea i really like the
"when you hurt, i hurt
when you smile, i smile
when you hate, i hate
when you fall, i will catch you"
that's just cute!!! aww i wanna guy like that!!!lol
raYchel -
this is great i loved it! i loved this so much! its just i loved how this could happen in real life and it wasn't some fiction love story! you did a great job!!! thanks for posting it i really enjoyed this piece!
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ummm aliens
that was great. sad but great.
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