A Rainy Moment

Its past 2 am, the heated room feels stuffy, suffocating, sleepless I go to open the window. The cold air enters and mingles with the warm air escaping from the room the mixture feels  pleasant, I look out on to the sleeping world, ensconced in their warm beds and sound proof homes oblivious to the fact as I was, that the rain has been falling for hours now. The puddles reflecting the lights, standing proof. A car turns in, it's lights catch the falling raindrops, the water on the road splashes out and I can hear the swishing sound as it comes closer, then it is gone, sometime later another car comes and goes, the feeling of total solitude is a bit shaken. But soon the silence takes over again. How quiet it is,  how peaceful. I look at the shadows of the palm trees as they fall on the hotel walls, the lights in the ground turning the palm fronds into frightening black giants. From between the waving palms I can catch glimpses of the fairy lights in the garden. Once more I turn my attention to the rain. It  falls gently, it's drops light up where they fall by the street lights, It falls slowly at its own pace like it is not in a hurry to finish its work but enjoy and savour it. Or like an artist painting with an eye to detail. Enjoying his work. The gentle sound is very soothing and as the world sleeps I look out at the rain's handiwork; the glistening roads, the puddles everywhere reflecting the light, the clean washed look of the buildings, the side of one building bright as its tiles catch the street lights, the cars clean and washed and gleaming in the parking lot. Above the sky is light, the heavy clouds bright in the reflections of the city's lights.  I look out, taking in light, reflections, shadows and darkness, and the rain, the ever falling, gentle rain, like a gentle hand upon the spirit, stroking it soothingly, Am I the only one to stand and delight in this?  There seems to be no one to tarry by the window for a moment and drink the deep peace of the scene below. 1

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  • SusanL
    October 20, 2004
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    All I can say is I loe the rain and I love this...
    Susan


  • MargaretG
    July 6, 2004
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    lovely

    This is a very calm and soothing vignette. I like the observation and detail you have written, I have seen the rain light up as it passes the lamps, and the shiny reflection in everything. Another detail I like is the clouds reflecting the city light; they aren't dark at night as they are by day. The palm trees place this in the tropics, the rain suggests it is not Arabia.
    You have a few run-on sentences, which continue for comma after comma, which it would be better to break up. Grammatically, "it's" is the contraction of "it is"; "its" is the possessive of "it".
    Wonderful writing, it was lovely and restful to read.


  • cc
    July 6, 2004
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    very nice story.i love reading about the rain.everyone has a new spin on it.

  • DourFlower
    July 6, 2004
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    Great write.

    Cool. It's beautiful. Very visual. Nice flow, like lepord said.

  • nchunn59
    July 6, 2004
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    10/10

    wow great write.Love the awsome flow to it and how well you can understand it.Well good job again and keep up the great work!

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