• You gave me your breath
But not to grant me death
You shared with me your air
So your daughter will be so fair
Before my birth
Before seeing light on earth
You kept me inside you
Before the whole world knew
• You became my home
My dwelling and my dome
Until my body started to form
You were my sacred dorm
Where I slept ate and played
Lived happy and stayed
You pumped life into my heart
So I will have a great start
• I don’t know how’s outside
Though I see it from the inside
Your eyes see and tell
If it’s free or like a cell
But I don’t know how I came
And from what I became
I sleep in your belly
I am tender like a jelly
• I heard a rumor roam outside
After which part of me died
I heard about this evil way
Through which babies are taken away
I heard it can take lives
Without blades and knives
Mommy, I beg you
Don’t take away my life too
• I don’t want to die this way
In sorrow and dismay
I am from your own fresh and blood
From you I grow and bud
Don’t kill me mommy
I promise I be you little bunny
Just don’t take my life away from me
I have much to live and much to see
• Mommy, I plead and say
Don’t kill me this way
How can you kill me?
When I am from you
My flesh my bones my heart my soul
My blood my air my everything
You gave them to me
Please tell me what you think
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This is sad I liked how you made it clear that it was abortion, even though you never even said the words "WHY WOULD YOU ABORT ME MOM!"..or something equally obvious. this made me really sad, even though i'm not against abortion (personally i would never get one, but i think the woman should have a choice. like, say she gets raped or something and doesn't want to have her rapists kid? that'd be a good instance to get an abortion). I liked how it was written by the fetus's..er. baby's point of view.
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thanks alots : for da comment i really appreciate and i am definitely do agree with your point
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wow this was just wow. I am lost for words.
Very well written and very sad. I have read this before and it still hits hard when i read it.
Very nicely done with all the emotion and description.
Keep up the great work.
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oh my...
lol..i know you've heard all this before but...this was really good..not only was it well written but it was also very deep. you write poems so well..keep up the good work. -
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thankness
alots
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Whoa, I really want to cry This is the saddest thing I'cve read in a long time and I really think It's sad that people don't consider who the person inside them can grow up to be.
Great job, keep it up!!
~Kevan!~
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thanks for da comment hun i appreciate alots
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Even though I'm for abortion, this was a great idea for a poem. The rhyme scheme was great and it flowed very well. From a childs point of view, this poem was more touching then if it was from a different point of view.
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abortion is a murder
i can't anything right in it :S why u are for?? thats weird. i want to know your side of view. well thanks for da comment alotsD: i appreciateeeeeethankies
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this made me sad it really made me cry
how can people do this stupid shit to kids I could never do that I have 3 babys and love every second of them they are my life good job tho this was writtin very well loved this good job again
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Thats so great! I loved it but how was she going to kill him?
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simple abortion:S
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God, that is so good, shows some great feelilng and emotion, oh so true, keep it up your doing great.
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