A Breath of Fresh Air -
Isn't it strange? The magnificent veil that has covered my eyes has also hidden the slow corruption of friends around me. Am I changing, or are they changing? I don't know, and life goes on. That's the way it has always been. Sad but true, I'd rather have the enchanting veil, than the drama and horrors of life. Selfish? No, I don't think so, it's natural. It's what anybody would want to do after succumbing to such an atrocity as life for this long, or even the bleak outlook of my own. After all, what more do you have to look forward to then a box in the ground?
Perhaps I am not making sense to the majority of you, but it does not matter, I did not write this for anyone, I wrote this for me to arrange and put down some thoughts of my own. Life's a bitch, and is as evident as ever, but I never loved a bitch as much as I have with life. Strange analogy that I have coupled life with, but then again, I am a strange individual. And in such I am in pursuit of something greater, in the same something that doesn’t exist, am I chasing my own red herring?
Perhaps a talk is something that I sorely need as I am writing this, and sad as it may be, so is a bat for mayhem, anything to take my mind off the current circumstances. Mayhem, havoc, destruction, whatever you may wish to call it. I’ll leave it at self liberation. However I may feel, I won't, or I should re-think that, can't, seeing as my limitations as to what I can and cannot do are thereby inherited by my code of conduct. Simply put, I’m a lame ass.
The life I want is simple, of no money. A life of just me and myself, growing in spirit and meeting various forms and types of people. From the bastards of bastards to the saint worthy unsung martyrs living amongst the ever growing population of man. Is that too much to ask? I don't think so, but then again, I don't think world peace is either. People, let me make one thing straight, I might not be high, but that doesn't mean that I know what I am talking about. I don't think any of us do for that matter, but that is why I call my statement an opinion. And thus, all I ask, a breath of fresh air.
A Poem -
It's all good, in the long run, so long and good night,
Sweet dreams to all whom I have fucked in the past,
I plant a wonderful memory within myself,
The love of life need not know the pains of man,
And so the story goes, my unfolding life,
Engulf your loved ones in your arms,
And embrace the moment of serenity,
I plant a wonderful memory within myself,
As I lean in and kiss the sky,
I behold the calmness of the ocean,
In peace do I hope to gain,
The wisdom of life, the embrace of man
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I was annoyed while writing this.
Please tell me what you think
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Breathe=breath
thus long=this long?
:?=?
Last line of poem...
the embrace man
the embrace of man?
in the poem the word "engulf" is---off
Your journaling reminded me of a comment someone left on one of my poems the other day...she said it looked like a very personal write that was not written with an audience in mind.
I thought about it and I was shocked because unless it's homework, nothing I ever write is written with an audience in mind and it never occurred to me before that most of the other poets are writing with an audience in mind and not from their heart and their true feelings.
I've found that if you truly want a certain kind of life, as much as we are capable of sharing the world with so many others, then eventually you'll be able to cut away everything and everyone that doesn't support that kind of life.
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hah, ooh, yeah, i need to fix that
ohh that's embarrassing.
you were correct in assuming that my spelling and word placement were a little... off. i probably rushed in transcribing my writing to digital text. thanks for finding those errors!
and screw an audience, as long as i'm satisfied for the moment it's grood =). although what you say is very true, there wasn't even an audience in mind for this piece, even though this was an assignment i did for creative writing class.
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Well there's depth in this piece. And I could feel the annoyance (please forgive my terrible spelling) in this.
Good points and I love this statement 'Life's a bitch, and is as evident as ever, but I never loved a bitch as much as I have with life.'
Sorry I couldn't be of more help.
~*Brooke*~
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Great
The first paragraph really grabbed my attention (which believe me, is no mean feat). You just cut straight to the point, i like that. Also how you refer to world peace as "not too much to ask" is the only point i disagree with. Theres always going to be some power mad person who thinks that they need to control oil, money the world. Mankind is corruptable...i know, we're all shallow but at the end of the day thats what makes us human (I'm gonna stop now because im gonna start preaching...)
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thanks for the comment
yeah, i agree, there can never be world peace. not only for our inherited shallow nature, but due to the fact that violence and territorial possession is etched into our history. you just can't deny years of (if you believe in it anyway) evolutionary progress.
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