In Loving Memory

Beep, beep, beep, beep, beep, beep, beep, beep, beep, beep,

Beeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeep.

And then there was silence, and there were tears, and there were gasps. A 63 year old legacy…, gone. He was a son, nephew, uncle, father, husband, cousin, even an inspiration, but most imprtantly he was my grandfather. And it was all

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  • Sweetie14
    October 25, 2008
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    well it's good because it's mine

    but i never finished it!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • SiGnEd KiSsEs
    June 11, 2007
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    this is really descent but u spelled importantly wrong ...fix it.kk but i like how its written. i thought it was gone be long but it was like only telling u breifly what happened leaving the reader to figure out what heappened. im thinking that the line went dead in the hospital....someone else would probably think it was a car doe.


  • bossy
    May 25, 2007

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    This sounds like it going to be a really good story so I think that you should finish the story i'm really looking forward to it.


  • romerooremor
    May 17, 2007
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    Good Job

    Please finish soon, I'm looking forward to it.

    beginning: 4, language: 2, plot: 1, ending: 1, dialog: 1, characters: 3.


  • Sweetie14
    May 17, 2007
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    Good

    Everyone should take in mind your beginning and use yours as an out line.

    beginning: 4.

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