Broken Dreams... Maybe Not


Sara Lisa Jones a 10yr old christian girl, lived with her motehr and brother in Memphis, USA. She studied at Green Grove Elementary. Sara was a very shy girl by nature ths the young girl did not have many friends. As a young girl Sara was very social and enjoyed spending time with her friends. But at 10 she did not like to mix around with other children. Sara was not a girl who enjoyed dressing up or playing sports. She had bigger things o think about. Sara wanted to be a ballet dancer.

Sara's parent's got divoced when Sara ws only 2yrs old. She had not seen her father James in over 5yrs now. He moved to Texas and started a new family over there. He also had a son who was Sara's younger brother. Eevn thoguh James was not a very big part of her life Sara did not mind. She did not feel as though she lacked a father she was very happy with her mother anf older brother.

Sara had been doing ballet ever sicne the age of 4yrs old. Her inspiration was a young ballet dancer named Kali. Sara and her family had gone to watch her perform for the title of Best ballet dancer at the the Memphis stadium. But during her performance the ropes that suspended the young women snapped and she fell to the ground. Sara was devastated when the young women fell. Kali was rushed to the St.John's hospital where Janice, Sara's mum worked.

One afternoon while Sara was visiting her mother at the hospital she asked to see Kali. Sara sat by the young women's bed and spoke to her. She asked if th women would ever perform again. The women could see the sadness in Sara's eyes. She said to her, "Go my child fulfill my dreams, become a ballet dancer and go on to win the title of best dancer" with those words she closed her eyes and went to sleep.

The very next day Sara enrolled herself at the Johnson's Ballet Asscociation one of the finest institutes of Ballet in Memphis. She worked hard night and day. She participated in many competitons and won various awards. She performed in many countries. Even tough she was young and famous Sara was still the same girl. She went to school like her friends ands studied hard to get good grades.

Author notes

This is my first long story with more than 1 chapter i hope people enjoy reading it.. The story contains many different emotions.. Anger, pain, sadness, happy and many more.. Enjoy them all

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  • xXGoddessofPainXx
    June 11, 2007
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    Hey guys

    I know you must think you have read this but i changed it a lot because my friend ebbs gave me some gud tips.. Thnx i hope its better now


  • asthray.heart
    May 18, 2007

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    This was good, very straight forward and simple. Some of the descriptions were very read from tha text book and dull.
    This chapter only seemed to be about describing their lives. You needed more background info on character emotion how she felt bout her rents splitting and her dancing.

    Otherwise you have a good sense of flow and direction here. Work on your sentenceing make them more fluent and less robotic.
    Great work and keep it all going.

    Lady Madeline.


  • bedovich
    May 16, 2007
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    yayyyyyyyy this so great i am gonna read the following chapters too :