“From the balcony”

♠ Moon’s so bright
The northern lights so bright
The sea so calm so tender
Stars sparkling in splendor
The waves how they dangled
The moonlights tangled
With the waves that tumbled
Then tucked to from golden ringlets
Of ember grey and golden crown
Dressing the cold shore with a gown

♠ Where the whole journey begins
Few meters from the ground
So calm and astound
There he stood all day long
Listening to the calm that crumpled on the shore
As if their were pitter-patters
Of his forlorn lover
Who had came home
But he found out
Were waves smacking onto the rocks
Throwing pebbles on the sand

♠ He looked below and saw
The rocks so refreshing and raw
Their tears dripped slowly
Perforating the spongy rock
The candle light shimmering
The light flickering
He stood on the balcony
Listening to sweet harmony
A nightingale lands on the chimney
Thinking the she is back
He climbs up to see with glory
Then he finds out it’s just a bird
Who had a nest?
Fluttered down to rest

♠ There is the sweet music
The soft violin
The wind smashing into the cushion
As shadows turn to ghosts
On the wall
Taking the face of his beloved girl
With long soft hair
He closed his eyes to weary and tired
But still he resisted
For she will return back
Home where she belongs
In his hands to ever stay
And never flee away

♠ Soon it will be dawn
She still isn’t home
Fog has faded in
Onto the ground
The mist of dawn is near
The dew starts to fall
Every drop pounding like a heartbeat
How badly he spend another night waiting
Suddenly the fog forms an angel
Calling his name on and on

♠ There he came near
To kiss his beloved so dear
Eyes closed and mind dreaming
As if she was a cherub
A white angel
But all a sudden he was on the parapet
He noticed underneath him was all vacant
It was soft as a cloud
As thin as the air
Suddenly the ground was not there
There he fell down so hard
From the balcony he fell and died
With the face of his beloved stuck in his eyes

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  • Blackwings
    May 11, 2007

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    WoW! That was of course greatly done I rele liked this a lot (Of course) Nicely done the flow and beautiful words Great job


  • SageSyren Greeters member
    May 11, 2007

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    This was beautiful. Nice flow and great description. Keep it up.
    ~*Brooke*~


    • bedovich
      May 11, 2007
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      thanks

      thanks for da comment brooke i appreciate alots

  • belowit
    May 11, 2007
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    why so sad? pretty good.
    ~belowit


  • Taboo Pixie
    May 11, 2007
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    this was good. filled with emotion. and it flowed nicely. thanks for entering the contest.


    • bedovich
      May 11, 2007
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      thanks for da comment i appreciate your acceptance for da contest


  • LostShadow silver member
    May 11, 2007

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    Very nicely done. Great job, great flow and heaps of emotion.

    Keep up the great writting.

    Em

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