“Disturbed”

• There is no peace for me
There is no way that I can be set free
At nights, you haunt me down
Shadows avenge as of a spawn
They creep and rise
Leaving me in shrieks and cries
They gather at the top
As if getting ready to drop

• There is no peace of mind
I am disturbed all the time
Dreams of you haunt so lime
In my heart you knock and knock
In my ears you whisper and talk
Ringing my drums around the clock
Hard and strong you stab my heart
So silent to break me apart

• Disturbed by your name
Once I hear, I drive insane
Disturbed by your look
Once I see my eyes flood and brook
Disturbed by your words
Assaulting like swords
Disturbed by your glances
That hit like knights’ lances

• Disturbed in the soul
Tortured as if I am a voodoo doll
Your memories haunt and chase
Holding me in a nightmare case
In a dungeon of darkness
So cruel in wickedness

• Disturbed by your existence
If you shall stay
It’s a must for me to go away
Depart away from life
For I am disturbed
Caught in a strife

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ON: Wednesday, May 09, 2007
AT: 1:19:22 PM
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  • asthray.heart
    May 9, 2007

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    This was another good one Pete, sorry about lastnight my internet crashed...I loved this one, very insightful you create images with words.

    Ebbz xo


  • LostShadow silver member
    May 9, 2007

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    another fine peice...Greatly done. The choice of words was really great.

    Very nicely done.

    Em


  • Miss Chell
    May 9, 2007

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    *Claps*

    I don't even really know what to say..this was amazing. I love everything about it: The message, the rhyme scheme..the choice of words..everything. The way you present the idea of this poem is portrayed so strongly.


  • Blackwings
    May 9, 2007

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    WOW!!!! Nicely done !!!!! I LOVED the imagrey and the flow Nicely done as always! Keep writing


    • bedovich
      May 9, 2007
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      10q

      thanks for da comment dearest i appreciate it alots

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