Derek the One Warrior (introduction)

Introduction

Once in a land of evil and witchcraft, there lived a beautiful girl named Twinkle Fairy.

She was the daughter of Trixton who was the ruler of an evil city called Drakador. She was the only daughter and the rest were sons. The sons were known as The Knights of Darkness, they go to and fro bidding the will of Trixton. Many feared them cause they have much power, and they have a dark aura that gives unearthly strength and power. There are 3 riders in all, there are more but are not needed because they got the honor of being Trixton and his household’s bodyguards.

Of course in every story there has to be some good people. Derek’s father was a warrior undercover who posed to be a farmer. Derek took a special interest in his father’s duty, and followed closely in his father’s footsteps (minus the farming) He has 2 younger brothers and absolutely no sisters. I forgot to mention he is supposed to be 17 years old, and very athletic.

This story takes place in only 5 countries in total. The countries in this story is like as small as a city. There are 3 races of humans.

1.Normal Humans

2.Humans who are born with unique powers

3.Humans who can fly

The story is about to begin…but you must wait for the next chapter sorry!

Author notes

sorry it's sooo short cuz it's the introduction

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  • quicksilver moon
    August 20, 2008
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    Seems like your story would be interesting to read. Write more


  • artemis the hunter
    October 1, 2007
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    sounds like this will have an interesting story to it. I look forward to seeing it.

    beginning: 5, plot: 5, characters: 5.


  • elemental-f1r3
    July 2, 2007

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    It gives a good overview and that's good. I can't wait to read the first chapter. Maybe you could lengthen this piece by expanding a bit on background of Derek, or the daughter.


  • Gum
    June 6, 2007

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    Nice intro... Sounds like it's gonna turn out to be one complicated story, so be careful, b'cos there might be a chance that you will lose the reader on the way.


  • Eternal Twilight
    May 28, 2007

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    Great start! I would've never thought to use an introduction in my story! I should do that. I'm waiting for the story!


  • sunnyset
    May 13, 2007

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    I can't wait.....

    ...for more!!!


  • Rain Valie
    May 12, 2007

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    XD! I see! It looks like an evil-looking, but good fairytale! I like your style. Keep it up, and I can't wait to read the rest! I'm kind of wondering about the three races of humans--but that makes it interesting! It's a great start, I'll look out for your new story! Good luck


  • Mikeypilk
    May 11, 2007
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    cool cant wait for the story

    good


  • EmeraldDreams
    May 10, 2007

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    Well, you have made a good start here, and set the scene nicely! I shall watch out for the next part!


  • Bloody Chaplain
    May 9, 2007
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    Sweet nice job.

    • stupid cupid
      May 9, 2007
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      thanks!!
      it's my very first story that i'm actually showing to anybody!

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