Love that life let it fly
Bring it back to say goodbye
Hi to you bye to me
Freedom rings the day they die
Hold me tight to run and hide
Never say goodbye just to hide
Hold it tight to just say goodbye
Never fall hold it high
Let it ring my freedoms die
Hold it tight it will never die
Our life is on you so hold it high
Cherish it on my hand so you can fly
And to never let it die arms held high
Reaching for the sky in this day I die
I fought for you and did it for me to
I did it this way and never going to stay
So good bye old friend I found my way
To hold and listin as freedom rings for me to die
A contest entry
- Under 200 words by QueenWolf.
140 points, ended May 22, 2007, 49 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Great
You spelled listen wrong in the last line. This was overall very good, so keep writing.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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great job keep it up
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I was different but to me it seems to repeat too much to be enjoyed. but good luck in the contest.
~Princess~ -
Wow... This vas very good! =D
It's emotional and sad, and also sweet, maybe bittersweet =)
Very well written, and well worded! =)
Enjoyed it alot Eva! =D
Gread job here! =)
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 5.
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aww great job eva this was very good you did one hell off a job
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this is so sweeeeeeeet nicely done
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