This is a long story. The kind that meanders and wanders like a lazy river not knowing where it’s going or where it’s been.
But when it gets there, all those twists and turns start to make sense, for they make the river what it is.
This is an old man’s story, long in the living and long in the telling, long after he got to where he was going….
Sit a spell if you have the time, and if not, good luck on your journey.
Please tell me what you think
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Great use of language.Interesting start to a novel.Like to read more of it.Please tell me when you write more!!!!Its harder to write a short,interesting part of a story than a long interesting part.Brill!
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This is kinda like "Take time to smell the roses" right? I like the way you did this and it has wisdom in the small amount of words you wrote it. (not that a small amount is a bad thing,lol) Great job!
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i have heard of it but have never read it , thanks for the comment . ill try and write moer of these
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I do not understand this but it dose flow nicely and I dont see a spelling mistakes so I think its pretty good.
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I like what you have here, the wording is done wonderfully, and it sets a certain mood, kind of like when you sit at your grandfathers feet and listen to him tell a story about the past.
It has a wise aura to it, though i'm not too sure what you intended by this little piece.
Is it the beginning to a story? Or does it end there?
If it is the former, i think it has alot of potential to be a wonderful story.
If it is the latter, then i apologise for my ignorance
Nevertheless great job, and keep writing!
Yrs.
Azaradelle.
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quite good but dont really understand, lol
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wow this was great, love the flow...and the words are really nicely written.
Keep on writting and well done
Em
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