Fire in my eye,Like a diamond in the sky.
Feeling for you like I want to cry.
Reaching for the stars in the sky.
Dreaming of you till I die.
This is my day that I dream on that star.
To bring my love for you even more,
I love you till the day we die,Dreaming on that star tie
To our hearts.
Because I love you like that for ever more
This is why your my wonerful star.
To bring my love for even more
To bring me close for ever more
Your my life my way threw that dark hole.
I found my light
Threw that wonderful star in heaven
Looking down on me the one I wish on,
That helped me threw
Thats why I love you
Author notes
I hope this is okay I tryed
A contest entry
- Under 200 words by QueenWolf.
140 points, ended May 22, 2007, 49 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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awww this is really cute i like it. its soft and flowy and yeah i dont have anymore adjectives to descibe it lol. but its really good!
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Well, good luck on the contest- it does have my name in it afterall. lol.
It's a cute and to the point peice... very nice. -
I like the image and implication of having the stars tied to our hearts. Maybe the stars ARE placed above us to have us reach out to it, like an optimistic move...
and to inspire us to aim high
^_^ I believe your poem might have had more impact if you corrected everything before submitting this to the contest that way, the reading flow would be smoothly done and typos or what won't detract the reader's attention but don't take me wrong, this was a pleasant read
Thank you so much for writing this and for joining the contest ^_^ good luck!
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Very romantic. Nice metaphores. Good luck for the contest.
~Diane.
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AHHH! are the extra line spacings intentional? if not please fix it, and if they are or when you have fixed it please leave me a comment on the face page please, and i will comment again.
Thanks
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o like it
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that was incredible
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nice!
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This is very nice! Great job!
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hooray
hoooray rip rip hooray wonderful poemsoda will love it
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