“Fiona,” Zoe called to my friend, waving her over, “Come sit with us!”
Picking up her lunch tray, Fiona got up without a glance at those she was leaving behind, and took her place with the popular.
Putting my sandwich down, all I could do was stare at the girl who, just the day before, I’d called my best friend. She had her back to me and I could hear her laughing. It was a laugh I’d get used to eventually. Loud and fake.
“What was that about?” Jamie asked, sounding as confused as I felt.
Turning back to the friends who hadn’t abandoned me, I shrugged. “No idea.”
“She just left? Just like that?” Donna asked, incredulous.
I nodded numbly, knowing nothing would be the same now that Fiona was gone.
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Your line spacing need to be fixed, it distracts from the story. I think you need some history behind it it asks more questions then it answers like why were they fighting?
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Short and simple
This is probably the shortest coherant story I have read on this site. This was better than I had expected for only 100 words. Gotta hate when friends change who they are for the "popular" people.
beginning: 4, language: 1, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 1, characters: 4.
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I was mildly confused...and I have no idea why...I liked it a lot though!! It was good and a sad truth of school sometimes...damn popularity contests. Anyway...good job!
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what part confused you? well, sorry about that.
glad you liked this!
thanks for your comment!
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You should continue this and add details. Here's a life lesson.
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i think i'll continue this.
thanks!
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great job
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thanks!
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awww!!! r u gonna make this any longer? its
really interesting!!!
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thanks! i think i'll continue this!
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This is sad, but sadly true also...
I think this does happen alot :/
Very well written Sara! =)
You get a great story in few words
Very well done =D
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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thanks Mads!
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Very true. So much said in so few words. It's sad how friends tend to grow apart over time.
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thanks!
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It was short, but it definitely gave a complete feeling. A familiar feeling for me.
Nice job, and there had better be more! THERE'S TOO MUCH STORY IN THIS IDEA TO JUST STOP HERE!!! -
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thanks!
sorry this is a familiar feeling for you.. more people than i thought can relate to this.
i'll try to continue this. i agree, there's too much story in this idea to stop.
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Uuch, I hate it when people do that. Nicely done!
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thanks!
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Sooooo true!!!! That's happened to me a lot latley but they all come crying back *sigh* When will they learn? Nicely done Great Job!!!!!
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it's sad what people will do for popularity..
too bad this kind of this happenes so often.
thanks so much!!
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