MINE
That’s what was written across the bedroom wall in dripping gobs of red.
My eyes followed a trail of bloody handprints where she had tried to pull herself along the wall to get to the telephone. At trails end there she was, folded over with phone in her lap.
"What have we got boys?" I asked, nauseated by the carnage surrounding me.
"Jean says she has a recording of a conversation with this woman last week" Fred replied. "He had threatened to 'stab her right in the hole where her heart should be.' I guess he really meant it."
Author notes
Getting exactly one hundred words was a big challenge for me because I didnt have access to anything but wordpad so I had to count the words again and again trying to get it right! 100 words is also challenging because its only enough for just the barrest glimmer of the scene I want to write. Anyways, fantastic idea for a contest! I plan on reading through the entries for the very reasons stated in your contest title- short sweet and sizzling!
Sarah
A contest entry
- Short, Sweet, and Sizzling by Arcularis.
750 points, ended May 26, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Ms Sarah, short and not so sweet. But a cracking good story. I Like, thank you.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Hey, Sarah, I checked your story in Microsoft Word and it says your story is 104 words. I can only figure it's counting M I N E as 4 words? Anyway, I'm liking it. Heck, when the contest is over, expand!
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Thanks eyeambaldman, I put MINE all together as one and deleted a word. Hopefully now its perfect!
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what a challenge! your details were fantastic - I love how you brought in the characters - detectives, right? Only thing to add - although you are limited on words and can't add it all - would be other senses - smell and such - but since this is for a contest it is great just the way it is!
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