I really don't know when I woke up, but when I did nothing was
what it seemed. Every entrance and exit was hidden from view and
each person looked like a monster. I don't remember what actually
happened before I passed out either, so I went exploring. On the
way, I met a curious little rabbit with a capricious attitude, and
the only way of satisfying it was to give him a sock.
"Who are you?" the rabbit interrogated.
"I am Nikita, warrior of the West. What are you?"
"I happen to be the highest monarch in the world, and if you don't
move out of my way... oh, is that a pearl?" the rabbit-king
reached towards the pearl like structure on my sword. Swiftly, I
moved it away from his reach.
"Don't touch that!" I commanded.
"Why?"
"That pearl happens to belong to Mistress Kira, of Waterfield
Lane, and I don't want you to touch it."
"And if I did?" the rabbit started for the pearl again.
"Don't!" the rabbit touched the pearl, and everything vanished
again.
So there I was, laying on the ground, passed out. Time
seemed to pass as slow as an ant crosses the world. It's not that
I minded, but I had a lot of things to do. I forced myself to
regain consciousness.
"That stupid rabbit!" I groaned and looked at my sword.
"Excuse me, did you just mention a rabbit?"
Startled, I jumped back about ten feet. Then I realized that I was
staring at a dextrous dragon, about two hundred feet long and wide
enough to fly on.
"..." I didn't answer.
"Oh, well. It must've been the air." The dragon flew off.
"This is such a weird place. Dragons talk, rabbits rule, what
next? Will trees fabricate glass? I must write about this," I
sighed and cleared my mind.
I wrote in my diary for the rest of my life, oblivious to the
fact that I had a job to do. Eventually everyone forgot who I was
and how much I impacted their society. The world seemed not to
exist to me anymore. It didn't matter- reasoning showed that to me.
I became the author of several publications and succeeded the
rabbit-king as ruler. It was the only important act that I
performed, and I think it shall be the last.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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good work
very interesting and it took me back to my chlidhood acting in alice in the wonderland
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Where's the mad-hatter and the Cheshire cat? J/K! This did have quite the 'Alice in Wonderland' feel about it though. I really liked the abstract style that you wrote this. It makes perfect sense in an absolutely nonsensical way.
Good work!!!
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"Time seemed to pass as slow as an ant crosses the world." I really liked the description in this sentence.
This was a good story, a bit confusing but that's just me. Well done!
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Not sure if my kids would understand this...
As I feel it had a "dark" side to it, but it is an interesting story with some twists that you don't see coming until they smack you. Very interesting.
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beginning: 2, language: 3, plot: 3, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.
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I like the way that you did this. It is a very interesting piece. Hope to read more from you.
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