She looked so peaceful now, so drained of blood. How did she get this way? Well, I had slit her throat with a pair of cooking scissors. She died after a few seconds, blood pouring out of her neck. She was no longer breathing. I was going to miss this one for she has not been my first, but my first love. I had loved hearing her screams of horror. It turned me on. She had been crying, begging for me to stop. I had no mercy. The only thing left to do was to take a picture of her like I do to all my victims. I stick them up on the wall to remember them. It's all I can do to stop myself. From what, I don't know.
A contest entry
- Short, Sweet, and Sizzling by Arcularis.
750 points, ended May 26, 2007, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
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Fucking awesome, I may say. Everything flowed well. There was no mistakes, nothing. There were no gaps in the story. Everything came together brillantly.
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Fucking amazing. It showed the impulse of a killer. Cool...
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Amazing but yet short and very well written. In 100 words only, you made it flow well and closed all the gaps. Well done! Nothing is missing in this.
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THIS.....
IS FUCKIN AMAZING! I adore the method of death! IT'S DARK, TWISTED AND SHOWS THE MADNESS WHICH IMPULSES A SERIAL KILLER. Kudos and congrats
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enticingly written! very good description. definitely full of mystery! i enjoyed it emensely!!!!
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good
why cooking scissors? why not something with a better blade? Do you cook? -
"It's all I can do to stop myself. From what, I don't know." I can see these lines as
a lead in to the killer doing something much worse in the future when this doesnt cut it
any more. Cut it. HAHA.
Departed by Marv
Very good climate description! Sneaking through the dark, the lightning and rain,
it sets up a scary enviornment perfect for planned murder.
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You had very nice detail, and it was a very good short story.
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It was very good. Usually short short stories like this, there's something missing but you wrote with great description that all the gaps were filled.
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Very descriptive stuff! I liked the keepsake angle as well. Nicely done!
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This story was very fast moving and kept my attention.Good work.I like how it was descriptive and I could imagine what was happining.
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Wow.. A pretty yet demented account of a twisted mind
I think you did well with this contest I find it sick that some killers DO take keepsakes of their victims.
Thanks for sharing this
Good luck with the contest ^_^ -
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Thanks for reading!
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