• Im thinking of cutting right now
But don’t worry im sure I will be fine
Don’t stress yourself out for me
The blood doesn’t come as fast as it used to
I have to cut deeper now, not shallow
Right now I can’t but
Too many people would be hurt if I did
I need to keep others well being in mind
Mine doesn’t matter when others are included
The pain shouldn’t be too much, put it off for a little while longer
One less scar I guess
• Im drunk now
Drank instead of cut you should be proud
Not that it matters because I am cutting now
The booze takes away the pain
I didn’t mean to cut as deep as I did
Couldn’t feel the blade go in, go to far
See the blood but, it spurted at me
I don’t know what that means did I strike a vein
Was I too late to take it back
Must have been
Im in your arms now
• Why did you come home so late
You could have saved me
Stopped me from dying
Dying in your strong arms of love
Least I won’t be lonely when I pass
I have you with me don’t I
Are you gonna leave disappointed in my weakness
Please don’t
Im fading fast, not just in your eyes
Help won’t come quick enough
They’ll be too late
Just like you coming home
• Late you found me on the floor
Lying cold in our bedroom
Fallen from the bed
The sheets im sorry they are so stained
I would clean them if I could
Sleep within them one last time with you
Ignore the deep cuts and smell of booze on my breath
Block it all out and tell me you still love
Promise me a sweet goodbye for the children
A quite lie so they don’t think me weak and selfish
I did not mean to leave them so young
Don’t let them know how I went from this world
Abandoning them the way I did
• My funeral I beg of you and the kids not to cry
Do not be sad for me
Mourn but live your life
Find a pretty young lady like me again
Choose them strong and live on happy
Lay the flowers weekly at my grave till you stop
Forget about me my love and raise our three children
You were to slow and I was too weak
Give them strength
Strength to be better then us
Me the miserable house wife of depression
And you the strong man with no feelings, you always did work late
Show them how to love and show emotion
A contest entry
- "Here's Looking at You Kid" by katiefran.
400 points, ended May 9, 2007, 15 entries
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um wow. this is not what i was expecting. i'll be honest and say i barely read the first verse, only because this is about love poems. you may find that injuring ones self is love, but i don't. i just can't see how someone would hurt themselves over a loved one (even though long ago i was a victim of that but it wasn't for love, it was about heartbreak for me) i hate to do this, but i'm going to have to DQ u. you may enter another poem that follows my rules if you wish. thank you for entering.
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oh yes this is great well done i like it being veru blod i can read it good job good luck in the contest
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It was sad I liked this a lot Thanks sooo much for entering and good luck
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This was beautiful... just really beautiful, and deep.. and wow. THe images in this, the emotions... I could have sworn you were writing from experience with just the amount of feeling I got from here - but I dare not assume
This is really a joy to read Thank you so much for sharing this with us
Good luck with the contest ^_^
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Sad...but I loved it!!!!! Nicely done!!!!
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this is very sad and beautifully done. lots of emotion, a lot of love. thanks for entering my contest and good luck!
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wowwwwwwwwww
this one is very deeeeeeeeeppppppp welll written i nearly watered mine eyes great work
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Woah,
I nearly cried.
But I liked it.
I really do hope your okay...
=]
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wow this was deep, I hope your okay...Good use of words, the emotion really comes through nicely.
Great job. Hope to see some more writting soon
Em
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