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The day I died was October 31st, Halloween, and it was suicide. I'd finally realised that the human race had screwed my life up so much that I didn't want to face anyone in the world ever again.2
I'd got the rope from my garage and tied it so it was a noose. I nailed it to the ceiling at the top of the stairs and stood there staring at it for hours. I'd made the plan. I'd die at midnight, as the twelfth chime struck, the hour when, on Halloween, the gap between the living and the dead is at its thinnest.3
I was not nervous at all, I'd lived my life as far as I could take it, and now that I couldn't it seemed the right time to die.4
At 11:58 I put the noose around my neck and waited for my Grandfather clock to chime, and eventually it did, on the eleventh chime I jumped and then the crack of my neck as it broke was exactly on the twelfth chime.5
Now I knew I was going somewhere better, I'd been christened, therefore, theoretically, I would go to Hell, and I believed thats where I was going because of the rush of heat I could feel.6
I don't know how long I'd been falling, I'd lost all sense of time and I could not see anything except blackness all around me. I hit my head on something as I fell, what it was I don't know, and all I remember was waking up in what seemed to be a huge underground cave illuminated in a red light.7
I was surrounded by a group of daemons of all shapes and sizes; huge seven foot creatures with horns and fiery breath, to small, faerie like, purple skinned creatures with bright orange eyes. Once I had fully come round they dressed me in a long, black, sleeveless dress, put a cloak around my shoulders as light as cobwebs and in the style of them too, and finally they made me put on some knee length, five inch heel, black, leather boots.8
After that ordeal they lead me to a door in the side of the cave, I entered and as soon as I did the heavy door slammed shut behind me. As far as I could see, I was imprisoned.9
In the room there was a full length dressing mirror, a bed of spikes and a hole in the ceiling where boiling magma was dripping from. I looked at my reflection in the mirror, my long black hair now had red streaks in it and it was tied up in a tight knot and seemed to be sewn on to my scalp. My eyes were now completely black, including what used to be the white of my eye and I had razor sharp fangs that had cut my tongue to shreds.10
This was definitely Hell, and I presumed this was only the beginning of my torture…11
After an uncomfortable night on the bed of spikes with magma dripping onto my bare stomach every thirty minutes, I was taken out of my cell.12
They dragged me to a great hallway where a guy with red skin was sitting on a thorned throne.13
“So, you must be the new girl here.”14
“Erm…Yeah, I guess so.”15
“Sorry, I must have sounded terribly rude, I’m Lucifer aka Satan aka The Devil, I’m here to sentence you to eternal torture, sorry, well, no, I ain’t sorry, Ha!”16
At these words I began to cry, he said them so sardonically, so evilly, I knew I was going to Hell, but I didn’t think Lucifer would be that harsh, eternal torture? That didn’t sound too appetising.17
“Calm down you daft bitch, it ain’t that bad, honestly, these days people that come to Hell are too weak, that is not what I want, not what I expect, especially from one that put herself here!”18
“I’m sorry Sir, it won’t happen again.”19
“It had better not, eternal torture is bad enough, I can easily make it ten times worse, shut up with your jibbering and sobbing girl.”20
He spoke to me as if he was my father, which I really hated because it made me miss him. I just fell where I was and couldn’t stop crying. Hell, my new home, but I could never fit in, Lucifer had called me weak, I didn’t belong here, I’m no one.21
Then the most bizarre thing happened, Lucifer came down to me, “There, there girl, what’s yer name? You sure are a pretty one ain’t ya?!”22
“It…It’s Lilith.”23
“Nice name, my slaves did a good job on you, you have to be the most attractive girl here.”24
I looked around the hall, only a few people, things, daemons, whatever they are, were there, and they were all pretty ugly, I smiled.25
“Thanks.”26
I was sent back to my cell after that, I guess I felt a little better, I lay down on the bed of spikes and let the hot magma flow down my face, chest, stomach and legs, the heat was great, every minute I felt more and more at home.27
I had obviously fallen asleep because a thundering knock on my door woke me. I sat up abruptly.28
“You awake Lilith? I need to talk.”29
“Yes Sir, come in.”30
Lucifer entered in all his glory, he really was magnificent, I think I’d fallen in love with him.31
“You enjoyin’ it here then? Lookin’ forward to yer torture?”32
My heart sank, “Yes Sir”33
“Nah, I’m kidding Hun, how could I let a beautiful maid like you get burnt and cut and make you depressed, eh? I came here to ask you something.”34
I stayed silent, staring deep into his black eyes, hypnotised by them.35
“Well, you see, I need a Bride.”36
“Hmm.”37
“And I was wondering… Would you like to be my Bride?”38
I snapped out of my trance, “Me? Are you joking?”39
“I never joke, I’m dead serious, answer now or the offers gone.”40
“Well, yes, I think I love you, I’d happily be your Bride.”41
He smiled, just imagine my shock when Lucifer asked me to be his Bride, I was overwhelmed.42
He left after that, leaving me to think about what was going to happen, I was the Bride of Lucifer, me, no on else, Me, I was special to him.43
A few days later, none of which I had seen Lucifer or been out of my cell, a beautiful, blood red, velvet dress was brought to me, together with a jet black velvet cloak. This was my wedding dress, and this was going to be the happiest day of my afterlife.44
Maybe killing myself was the best thing I’d done after all, I was finally happy.45
Author notes
what do you think? It's taken me ages to finish this off!
Hope you like it xxx
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Thanks very much for your comment, glad you enjoyed it.
Gg -
great work
Very interesting. You did a wonderful job on this story. I couldn't believe she was happy to be Satan's bride. Overall, you did a great job on this story. You have a great talent in
writing. Keep up the amazing work.
~becca~ -
i likes my poem anyway, you where the only one who didnt never mind, see ya love charlotte, by da waty, when i went on ap, it came staright up in your thingy, so i accisently on being you lol
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lol, glad you liked it!
Georgia
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Oh I love this! *giggles* I wanna go to hell... lol sounds like a blast
amazing write!
~Amy
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Great write! It seems sorta creepy, but interesting, very interesting. I loved it, keep writing!
~Katie -
Thanks!
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How intresting. Quite the imagination.
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Thanks!
yeah, there's gonna b a sequel, i don't know when,. but there will be!!!
Georgia
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AWESOMELY AWESOME!!!
this was so awesome i loved it....u used some really good ideas....wow it was so brilliant....if there is gonna be a sequal i cant wait to read it....ttyl
~sierra~ -
Lol, kewl, yeah, there's gunna b a sequel to this, i don't know when though, i'm glad you liked it!
Georgia
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It was wicked cool! Usually I don't have the patience (ADD) to read an entire story, but by the time I had reached the end I was begging for more!! Keep on writing!!!
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Thanks! There's going to be a part 2 when i get round to it after homework and stuff, about the wedding and honeymoon!
I'm so glad you enjoyed it, thanks
Georgia
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two thumbs up!
this is creepy, well written, imaginary, brilliant, and I demand more of it! lol..I'm j/k... I do hope you write more though.
This is very good, it was catching and sickening. thats why I like it..lol.. anywho I enjoyed reading this. great job and keep writing and I'll try to keep reading.
Heather -
Thank you, Yes I am doing a part two, it'll probably be the wedding and honeymoon.
I'm so pleased you enjoyed it
Georgia
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I don't mind yuo're entertained by this, I'm kinda glad you enjoyed it enough to read ti again, I have decided to write Part Two, but I don'y know when it'll be done, I'll let ya know!
GG
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excellent
Excellent write...what an interesting concept. Lucifers bride. Maybe hell won't be so bad after all. The imagery was excellent...very easy to read...delightful to read...so many things go through one's mind at the end of a life...suicide on Halloween...how befitting...the tour through hell...intriguing...to view the story through your eyes and your words...delightful. Looking forward to part two..that would be the honeymoon wouldn't it. Victoria Lin -
I had to read this one again. "This was definitely Hell"
and "after an uncomfortable night on the bed of spikes with magma dripping on my bare stomach" .... these are classic
lines ....
this story is so highly entertaining...
do you mind that I am entertained by your eternal damnation?
I just SO hope not.
Good writing..
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Thanks, no prob, you can tour Hell any time with me!
Glad you enjoyed it!
I may do a follow up, so you may be able to peep in on the honeymoon after all
Thanks for the comment
Georgia
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Thanks! I will probably do more on it, or maybe write another story as a follow up on this, i dunno
Thanks for the comment!
Georgia
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Oh, I love the idea. It's really great. I loved the descriptions and everything. Hope you do do more with it, and I'd love to read it.
~Laura -
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Brilliant and funny and cool.... !
Thanks for letting me tour Hell with you...
Love this story !!!
Looking forward to peeping in on the Honeymoon..
This is aevil at its best.
B -
Good
I thought it was a really good idea for a story, and some of your descriptions and humour was really good, the only thing is she fell in love with the devil (that sound weird) a bit quickly, you didnt really explain it. Apart from that it was really good! -
thank you mom
I will probably fiddle with it and add some more to it
love you
Georgia
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this is a very incredable written story. i hope there is more to come in it. you are such a beautiful writter hunny.
love
mom
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