Like You

-Stay low.
Soft, dark, and dreamless,
Far beneath my nightmares and loneliness.
I hate me,
For breathing without you.
I don't want to feel anymore for you-

She’s gone. Never will I see her again. I can’t believe she’s dead, I watched her die. A mother’s touch is gone, her daughter left with nothing except for an abusive older brother. The love between us is gone; love is gone now. So is hope. I’m lost without her. Doesn’t anyone see that? She kept me on the right path, loved me, and cared for me. Now that she’s gone, nothing is possible. Damn you for leaving me. I cry her name. Nightmares taunt me. I cry every night because I miss her so much.

She’s my mother, the only person who was my friend.

Grieving, I used to grieve her. But now, I don’t grieve her. Everything leads to her. There’s an invisible wall between us and I can’t get through it or see through it. I wish it was melted away. Let me be with her. I just want to see her one more time, feel her warm touch and feel the way she embraced me. I want to hear her sweet, calm voice just one more time. Why can’t I be with her? I don’t understand why I can’t be with my mother after death. It’s not fair…

Mom, I long to be like you. You lie cold in the ground and dead. All alone. There’s room in that coffin for two. I want to be with you. No one understands that I need her. I long to be like her. She lies cold in the ground and dead. I want to lie cold in the ground with her, no matter what. All I want to do is be with her. That’s all I ask. Is that too much to ask?

-I long to be like you
Lie cold in the ground like you
There’s room inside for two
And I’m not grieving for you
I’m coming for you-

Mom, you’re not alone because I’ll be with you soon. I’ll climb inside that coffin with you and lie with your carcass, even if it’s decayed. It doesn’t matter. At least I’ll be with you then. I’ll hold your hand and then, you won’t be alone anymore. That’s when I will be with you forevermore. Don’t worry because, I will leave the whole world and everyone else just to be with you. I love you. We’ll be together again, stand at each other’s side.  Keep each other company for eternity, be so happy and safe. Wouldn’t that be nice? I can’t breathe and live without you.

I’m coming for you and I won’t be grieving anymore.

Author notes

I know it's short but that's how it's supposed to be. I was having trouble with writing it since it was so emotional to me and I wanted to avoid having a breakdown.

Evanescence-"Like You"

This story is about my mom who died of cancer six months ago. I've been grieving for her ever since and I'm still kind of fragile about this so I would appreciate it if people aren't too harsh when commenting this. I had took the idea of the Evanescence song "Lik You" and used it to write a song about my mother. The whole story is about how I actually feel.

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  • Poison.
    September 11
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    Thing's will get better, I promise you that.


  • McrSAVEDmyLIFE
    April 26, 2007

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    Damn. I mean, I know what it's like to lose someone, not my mother, but I lost my best friend to suicide, and I know how much it hurts. I really hope that everything turns out okay. Even though you don't know me, you can talk to me if need be. I'll listen. Hey, maybe your mom's in a better place? I really loved this thought-story-thing. It really got to me. I guess all I can say is thanks for entering, I have high hopes for you.


    • Pray For Me
      April 26, 2007
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      Alright, if I need someone to talk to, I will talk to you. Thanks for reading.


  • asthray.heart
    April 23, 2007

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    I am very sorry for this, it is sad to lose a loved one and can take a long time to get over if we manage that stage.
    Shortness and wether it is good or not does not matter when it touches on a sensitve personal matter.
    It is then the emotion portryaed, which it was in this peice that matters, and you did a good job at capturing that.

    Am wishn you well my dear and hopen you well with good luck in the contest.

    Lady Madeline.


  • strawberry26
    April 22, 2007
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    thanks just what i was looking for in showed me alot of emotion thanks agian


  • Mai4ever
    April 22, 2007

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    I know how it feels to lose someone but especially when it's your mom, it's tough. You did a good job writing this. When I read stories such as this, it gets me all teary cause it reminds me of other things.


  • Kyoku Luv
    April 22, 2007

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    Oh October.

    I'm sorry for your loss.

    This was very emotionally sad. You did very well on this...I've started a story using this song, actually.

    Great job.


  • Unpredictable Lover
    April 22, 2007
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    That's so sad, I am terribly sorry about your mother. You did a good job on this peice, it made me want to cry. I am not sure what it is like to lose a mother, but I'm sure it is hard.


    Anyway, this is good, I enjoy reading stories like this. Again, I am sorry for your loss.

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