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In the fall, the winds changed, clawing at my siblings and I. They were threatening- threatening to pry me from my home and carry me away to die. I loathe the wind, that traitor to nature! That is why when I saw my brother, Paul, fall to his death I cried. I cried and cried until my body was red with my own blood, and then I began to shrink and shrivel. I wallowed in my own grief. The sinister fiend, the wind, could do such great disaster without a risk of damnation, for the immortal never die. Paul was my friend, my mentor- and now he was gone. He taught me how to swaying the early spring when I was just from a mere bud. He was there for me the first time I felt the warm summer sunshine in my soul. I loved his flamboyant ways, though I swear he was just being pompous. He did not go far from mother. That is what haunts me to this day. I had to watch him die. He turned from his vibrant shade of emerald slowly into yellow. All along, I heard the cry of him and my other siblings who had fallen-- a thunderous crunch in my ears. There spines and all were crushed in an instant if they were lucky, but most of the time the booted demons would only kill apart of them so they would sit in agony for days. I had been told the worst is yet to come. The bodies of the fallen fill up and begin to mold. They turn a sickly black and are destroyed by the water that once gave them life. Even the bravest of us are condemned to this fate. I cannot wait for my time. The wind will come, grasp my frail form, and carry me off to die. I only hope, to my pleasure, it is by my brother’s side. Maybe then his light will return to me. 2
Author notes
I used 331 words. For your words I used 11 of you words and they are: Sinister
Loath
Mother
Destroyed
Damnation
Condemed
Pompous
Traitor
Vibrant
Flamboyant
Disaster
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It was good you got the point across to me and i liked it but can't say i can relate to it.Keep going
Mandi -
Ah.. I tired t keep the subject in the lwayside but to tell you what it is which will put it in a new light...it is a leaf talking. Their mother is the tree and naturally her brother is another leaf
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Such a large usage of my words. Why thank you.
This is a great job. NOw exactly what is the narrorator? At firs tI thought it was a bird, then I wasnt sure. Someone who had fallen into a lake.. I weasnt sure. The emotion here is raw and heartwrenching, and as much as it hurts to read it, I must say. Very nicely done. And I mean it too... this was VERY nicely done.. you made it simple, easy, this wasnt somehting I'd expected at all. In the fewest words, and the most simplist of forms, you got teh point across.
As I've told many others.
Bravo!
his contest is getting hard as all hell to judge -
Hmmm this has emotion yes
but i dont feel it all the time, it seems to leave the come again...Though I love the topic and use of words...awsome job
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