I'm 16 and my favorite cookie is white chocolate macademia.
http://storywrite.com/story/246064 "Oh no! That's never fun to find. (: It was an action-packed start, it will be interesting to see what happens next. (:
There were a few grammar things, a few misplaced commas, or missing punctuation marks, little capitalization errors, small things like that. (:
The opening paragraph has pretty imagery, but it's a bit of a run-on sentence. It would be more concise if you parsed it into fewer sentences. For instance, "Her feet dragged along the ocean shore. Beside her, the waves crashed, sending the strong scent of sea salt up her nose. She tripped and stumbled, jarring back the memory of the night before."
Obviously, it's your writing and I'm not trying to encroach on that or put words in your mouth. It was just in example of how a sentence can make a big difference.
Can't wait to see more! (:
Picture prompt: 11) http://ohsophisticated.deviantart.com/art/rain-100495884 My favorite place to go is Bermuda.
Option 2, autumn. lolt
Something clever That's the best I got Tay-Tay (: ]
I took the beginning of an old story...a little past line 1, and then I tweaked that and wrote the rest just now. I'm impulsive and sometimes strange when I write at night, so be sure to tell me what you think! Thanks for reading (:
I was channeling Daniel Craig as James Bond a little in the main character. (: Mostly the suit, not the sentiment. He wasn't there to kill her.