She's just a normal girl
Trying to live a normal life
But things are getting in her way
People are whispering and inside she cries
Why can't I be like her
So perfect in every way
She just wants that one person
To wipe these tears away
She wants someone to spill her heart to
Someone to lend an ear
Someone to take the cares away
But here she sits, alone in her room
Crying out her heart
As tears soak the pillow beneath her
Doesn't anyone care?
Is anyone out there?
But alone she is in the world
With no one by her side
She just wants it all to end
Just make it go away
She takes the knife and starts to pave a way
A path of shimmering red
Her breath goes short as the knife falls on the bed
She collapses on the ground
The carpet wet beneath her
She takes a look around
Sitting there on the shelf
A book of black and gold
Inside lay many stories
Of someone who did care
She looks down at her arm
Soaked in red regret
She gathers what she has left inside and stumbles to the shelf.
Opened the book and looked inside
As tears welled in her eyes
There on the page
A picture of a man
With blood running as she
Hung there smiling on a tree.
She remembered the stories.
She hummed the rhymes.
Of a man on a cross in Calvery died.
At that moment she forgave all
Just as he, even though he was worse off than she
From that day on
She smiled at all
Without a doubt or fear
Because she knew her Promised Land would soon be near.
A contest entry
- something about one of your loved one's you care for by strawberry26.
130 points, ended April 22, 2007, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Religious Fanfiction by Delfishie.
275 points, ended April 21, 2007, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
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twisted!
I like the creepy edge of religion in this story - instead of making it better, it made the whole tale ten times more disturbing, so good job there!
...But, where is the fanfiction? Where are the previously-made characters interacting with your made up character?
Ah well. Still a neat (and TWISTED! WOO!) poem. -
that was great, truly, it was
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i liked this a lot and the description in the begining about how she feels is how i feel a lot of the time
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I read a poem of yours earlier, and liked it. I read this one and I am enamored with it *claps*
I think most of us have, at one point or another, felt the same as how you have written in the first half of the poem. I guess we are each looking for someone who would make us feel whole. ^_^
I'm not exactly religious, but I love how you integrated Christ in your poem. I've gone astray from my faith and beliefs a number of times, but I've always been accepted back
this is a beautiful tribute to Him.
Thanks for sharing this ^_^
Good luck with the contest
Welcome to StoryWrite ^_^
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wow wow wow this was very good it mad me think of my dad and grandma thank for entering
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