Bent over backwards
Bullet casings spread out on the floor
Feel emotion no more
Splattered remains on the wall
Memories wasted and time well spent
Black nails and blood red lips
Drip the pain from my eyes and black them out
Cut my wrists on the dotted line
Draw the beads like blood from the flesh
Carve out my heart and shatter my soul
Life is nothing but a black abyss
Swallow me up into the darkness
Take away my life
Stare down a gun and listen to songs
Slit my wrists for peace
And kill for life
A contest entry
- poetry contest, the best poems you ever written by bedovich.
350 points, ended April 29, 2007, 24 entries
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Woah...
That was...
Very...
One word:
WOAH.
I loved it!!
Especially the line:
Carve out my heart and shatter my soul
Love Love Love!!
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I loved this line...
-Cut my wrists on the dotted line-
I can actually SEE someone doing that...maybe I'm just disturbed....I think I am.
I liked the poem though, it was different, but very emotional.
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I LOVED this poem. The format was awsomely done I rele liked the line, 'Drip the pain from my eyes and black them out...' Very strong and i could FEEL it!!! Truly and of course masterfully written 'Swallow me up into the darkness' Was also a very strong line I could rele Feel the pain and agony (Not that this poem isn't depressing ) But I LOVED every bit of it!!!!
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Hey Ebb.. I'm still reeling from this x.x some pains are just too extreme.. that people do other crazy things to divert that pain.. some even take their own lives. Then again, I like to think pain is good.. but too much of something IS bad... so even if pain does help us grow, a person could only take so much of it
Thanks so much for sharing this emotional piece full of imageries
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hey hunnnnn
i love this alotssssssss
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So sad very well written though. I like the way that it flows with lots of emotion...well done.
Please write more soon
Em
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