The perfect love story? Doesn't exist.
I saw you; I loved you.
He takes her hand in his.
She sits on the beach, silently.
They continue waiting for each other.
She smiled; he smiled; they laughed.
Together at last, they were free.
One, two, three. I'm in love.
She lost him, but still hopes.
Author notes
This is for a contest with 6-word stories. All of mine are love stories. Very, very short love stories. Please comment.
A contest entry
- Six Word Stories by Delfishie.
175 points, ended April 30, 2007, 36 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Whatdya think?
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Heartache...
Yes, there seem to be alot of love stories in this contest. But your's were great! Attention grabbing and aching.
"The perfect love story? Doesn't exist." So cynical it just makes you want to cry. *tear*
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Wonderful
This was awesome, and so simple. Even though they could all be taken seperately you can kinda read them together as jumps in time. It was great. I never knew 6 words could make so much sense.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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You're Writing? Is Fab! More Please
Love
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My favorite was:
"She sits on the beach, silently."
This one to me says so much on its own and yet has so many possibilites. Very thought provoking.
Good luck for the contest.
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Beautiful!!! I Loved it Nicely written I like your love stories
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interesting
They work as individual 6-word stories, but together to read as an overaching love story with upward moments and downfalls. Neat effect.
The background was a *bit* too bright to read this well. But maybe it's just me?
Great job.
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