He had been called a monster for so long that he was beginning to believe it. After all, if he wasn't, than why did the children flinch away when he approached; why did his village hate him so much that they were willing to burn him alive. The answer was truly a simple one...he was a demon.
Oh, they tried to tell him otherwise. Storm told him that the children were always weary of new people, and Xaviar went out of his way to make sure he was comfortable, but it didn't change the facts. The children were afraid; he was the cause of this fear.
Logan was the only enigma. The wild man never denied or covered the fact that the children were afraid of him...if anything, he made sure to tell him. He never thought to approach him about why; why should he? Yet it also peaked his curiosity, and so he started paying closer attention to Logan; he started paying attention to how others were around him.
Despite the fact that he taught them, the children seemed to naturally stay farther away from him than they did with the other teachers...it was like they were afraid of him. True, there were those who did stand closer, but overall, the children stayed away. Likewise, Logan stayed away from them; he seemed to understand why they backed out of the room he was in...
Finally, one day, he had to know so he asked. Why do the children hide from you? Why do you hide from them? He hadn't been expecting anything really; maybe, he would get a glare or a sharp retort...not an answer though.
"Because I'm an animal."
Why do you remind me that they do the same?
"Because...we're brothers."
Author notes
If it wasn't obvious...which I don't think it is...this is my Kurt mini character thing. I always liked the Kurt/Logan friendships...so here it is.
A contest entry
- X-MEN: Fanfic, short story, ANYTHING YOU WANT! by Leslie Jo.
175 points, ended May 5, 2007, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love X-men. Good one.
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I love X-men... in particularly that cutey Logan... I'm quiet a fan... but who the hell is Kurt? Hmmm... maybe I didn't see that character because my attention was always on Logan
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Anyway, back to your story.
The discription was great. I was running through the lines in hope to see more... to see what will be next. I do think that you have to continue with this.
Great story. Congrats on the trophy. You deserved it.
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cool
i really like it. you should continue
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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The writing is very good. To this point there is a great deal of description, something that catches my attention.
One major thing stands out: There is no clue about who this character is you are writing about. Even though you won a Bronze (congrats) it would have been nice to work what you had in your mind into the first part of the story.
With the quality of writing there is no doubt you should continue. Possibly expand into another genre or something else along this same line.
beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 4, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 3.
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It might be wise at the beginning to let the reader know who the character was. I was very confused until I read the authors notes. And the second to last sentence doesn't make any sense.
Other then those, it was a good start. You should continue on with this. These two are my favorite characters.
~*Brooke*~
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I liked how you made everything so descriptive. I love descriptive writing. It pulls the reader (me at least) in.
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Interesting start, good luck withit. I think the writing and dialoge are both fine, and if you're comforable writing it, more power to ya.
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It was a very good X-Men fanfiction because your style of writing is fascinating. Continue to fascinate others! Great job
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I think you definately have a talent for story writing. you have developed a characer nicely in this piece, and given the reader a bot of understanding about him. its a very good scene-setter. great job!
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Whoa...this is a very good twist to the X-Men. I like it. I never really thought about this kind of thing.. I'm a big Logan fan, so.... This is really good! Good luck and thanks for entering!
LJ
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