“Our Childhood Days”
• The bubblegum lollipop in my mouth
In the ages of early sprout
Messing with water when there was drought
Under the tree we used to scout
We sang all day high we shout
Use rocks to hit the clout
Went to fish brook trout
We fought pretending to be in a bout
• Flew a paper made plane
Down the green lane
Driving the teachers insane
We got beaten with the cane
Left to soak wet under the rain
We were masters of the feign
With it came to creating pain
• After the mail man
We ghastly ran
Threw pebbles at the ice-cream van
Beneath the tree house we ate flan
In the alley we drew our plan
Left the cat in the garbage can
Played football with the soda can
Sprayed bubbles on the attic fan
• We filled water in the ant hole
Became like Indians face marked with coal
Tortured the hamster and the mole
We sprung down the mall
Spreading foam in the hall
Applying glue on every pole
When people did stroll
We laughed as they tripled to fall
• By the channel we used to seat
The muddy water runs into the drain under our feet
The pavement cracking under the heat
Hot enough to make roast meat
Down the muddy river of the street
We made little ships aligned like a fleet
Blowing them to compete
soaked in water they disappeared into the street
Under our feet where we used to seat
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ON: Thursday, April 12, 2007 /AT: 8:49:09 PM
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Author notes
happy childhood days i like the last stanza alots
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Nice One!
I did enjoy thie poem. Graet wording a nice rythm and the pace is also excellent.
I also write about my childhood/teenage years.
All the best.
jsdk.
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childhood memories are fun. This was good. thank you for entering the contest.
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Pete this was wonderful, I do not think much of the animal parts were you tease but all in this was rather nice and I liked it alot.
Different from your other work.
I shall I think as Soda has said promote this for the front page.
Nice job hun and wishing you well.
~Ebony.
xox
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I liked it!!!! I liked the words Nicely done!!! Makes me think of My childhood. The good times.
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thanks
thanks for da comment
much appreciated
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Hey Pete, I like this a lot - the rhyme and sort of singsong-y-ness made it seem all the more nostalgic ^_^
It reminded me of my own childhood, what I used to do and the littlest joys I would get from doing random things 
You say it's unfinished, but for some reason, I feel it IS finished - but that may be my own opinion? ^_^ you need to ask more
Thanks for sharing this with us
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thanks
well i am a bit concerned abt the content i think i should make it larger like adding a few stanzas u know play with soldier toys, break the windowpane with the ball, threw bottles as if were bombs things of this sort.
but i donno i need u guys to help me out -
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You may need to get Ebb and Lizzy here to comment! And feature it! go go go, get more opinions!!! and good luck with the adding! ^_^ just tell me when you add more I'd read!
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