“Why my baby left”

“Why my baby left”

♠ Oh , sweet heavens of shining stars

See my wounds and cureless scars

See my tears of non stop wails

See me wandering over the rails

Waiting for that train

See me while I am still a bit sane

See my tears that flow through the drain

Tell me if this will ever remain?

Tell me when I will be insane?

Saneness isn’t my right

I need darkness I don’t need light

♠ Oh, elements of universe

Tell me why u cursed me with this curse

Oh. Revolving planets of the Milky Way

Tell me was I worthy for that severance day

Tell me if there was fire in my eyes

If there was evilness in my pupils

See my tears falling in ripples

My heart gets handicapped and cripples

See how much I miss my baby

How much I miss my beautiful lady

See everyday I dry my bed

Put it under the sun to sunbath

For its soaked and damp

See how I became a tramp

I have a home

But what’s the use when she’s all gone

And I’m all alone

♠ Oh, angels oh the night sky

Tell me when I will finally die

Stop playing those harps for one day

Tell me if you ever listen, to what I pray

Tell me about the days that my eyes used to glisten

See how I miss her

Don’t you know how happy we were?

But now my tears made my sight so blur

If even I saw her in my way

I wouldn’t even recognize her face

For no more spring of May

Will come and give me grace

No more hands will come and touch my cheeks

Wiping tears off my eyes of creeks

I still keep her handkerchief

That she left behind with her tears crystallized

Bringing me sorrow and grief

♠ Oh, God you’re the only one left

Tell me who committed this cruel act of theft

Tell me what did I do?

Tell me where I went wrong

That you sentenced us with heartache

Declaring that we together cannot go along

Nor to each other we belong

God you see my weeps forming a lake

You see my burden sinking in it

If suicide I have to commit

Will you still permit?

To see her only for a little bit

For a tiny itsy bitsy whit

♠ Let me see her of a glance if not

Tell me so I can go and slit

So I cut my heart and split

So no one can ever come to knit

But before I do all this

Remind me of that sweet kiss

And tell me where and why she left

So I get quenched in abyss

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  • April 12, 2007
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    good job


  • LostShadow silver member
    April 11, 2007
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    This was another great poem. Well done

    Great job

    Em


  • kenddrraaa
    April 11, 2007

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    I liked this alot. The only problem is.. it isn't a story. Its a poem. In my contest i said i wanted a story. But this is really interesting so maybe i'll reconsider when i'm judging.


    Good luck and thanks for entering.


  • Blackwings
    April 11, 2007

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    OMG!!! THAT was really GOOD!!!! It made me sad I wanted to cry. I loved the rymes. It sounded devine. Now i need time to stop makin these dang rymes...


    • bedovich
      April 11, 2007
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      rhymes

      rhyme its a part of the musical devices in poetry it creaes a sweet touch our life is rhymedlike a sweet flow of rivers
      even heart beats lke di dum di dum di dum then it goes di di dum di di dum then dum di dum, dum di dum>. well that's also entered in rhythm thats in poetry like feet and meter i know them all i can apply them too even if i write nonesense musical devices will make poems shine

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