“Why my baby left”
♠ Oh , sweet heavens of shining stars
See my wounds and cureless scars
See my tears of non stop wails
See me wandering over the rails
Waiting for that train
See me while I am still a bit sane
See my tears that flow through the drain
Tell me if this will ever remain?
Tell me when I will be insane?
Saneness isn’t my right
I need darkness I don’t need light
♠ Oh, elements of universe
Tell me why u cursed me with this curse
Oh. Revolving planets of the Milky Way
Tell me was I worthy for that severance day
Tell me if there was fire in my eyes
If there was evilness in my pupils
See my tears falling in ripples
My heart gets handicapped and cripples
See how much I miss my baby
How much I miss my beautiful lady
See everyday I dry my bed
Put it under the sun to sunbath
For its soaked and damp
See how I became a tramp
I have a home
But what’s the use when she’s all gone
And I’m all alone
♠ Oh, angels oh the night sky
Tell me when I will finally die
Stop playing those harps for one day
Tell me if you ever listen, to what I pray
Tell me about the days that my eyes used to glisten
See how I miss her
Don’t you know how happy we were?
But now my tears made my sight so blur
If even I saw her in my way
I wouldn’t even recognize her face
For no more spring of May
Will come and give me grace
No more hands will come and touch my cheeks
Wiping tears off my eyes of creeks
I still keep her handkerchief
That she left behind with her tears crystallized
Bringing me sorrow and grief
♠ Oh, God you’re the only one left
Tell me who committed this cruel act of theft
Tell me what did I do?
Tell me where I went wrong
That you sentenced us with heartache
Declaring that we together cannot go along
Nor to each other we belong
God you see my weeps forming a lake
You see my burden sinking in it
If suicide I have to commit
Will you still permit?
To see her only for a little bit
For a tiny itsy bitsy whit
♠ Let me see her of a glance if not
Tell me so I can go and slit
So I cut my heart and split
So no one can ever come to knit
But before I do all this
Remind me of that sweet kiss
And tell me where and why she left
So I get quenched in abyss
A contest entry
- Mourning by kenddrraaa.
350 points, ended April 15, 2007, 21 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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good job
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This was another great poem. Well done
Great job
Em
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I liked this alot. The only problem is.. it isn't a story. Its a poem. In my contest i said i wanted a story. But this is really interesting so maybe i'll reconsider when i'm judging.

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OMG!!! THAT was really GOOD!!!! It made me sad I wanted to cry. I loved the rymes. It sounded devine. Now i need time to stop makin these dang rymes...


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rhymes
rhyme its a part of the musical devices in poetry
it creaes a sweet touch our life is rhymed
like a sweet flow of rivers
even heart beats lke di dum di dum di dum then it goes di di dum di di dum
then dum di dum, dum di dum>. well that's also entered in rhythm thats in poetry
like feet and meter
i know them all i can apply them too even if i write nonesense musical devices will make poems shine
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