“Put your faith in me.”
She had whispered those words, words that were now void and empty, serving only as the remnants of a memory. She said them that night when I was sick and crippled, tenderly spooning me my meal and I eating without protest. Back then, under the delusion of pain and alcohol, I believed her. Or perhaps I had to, her gentle voice echoing with confidence compelled me to. She held me up when my world was falling down, and she held me close when no one else would. So when I woke up tonight from a familiar dream and stared at the empty space next to me, I felt guilty.
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nice for shuch a short write. gives a chilling glance into the mind of a character, but doesn't give too much else. it's avery good start or ending to a story, but not much of a story in itself. gvery good writting though!
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i would usually like this but my contest kinda requires a mind blowing twist or concept so i think the story is a little too minimalist to be seriously considered but otherwise good work
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Well
What there is of it seems okay, but there just isn't much to this. It leaves me mostly with questions. Thanks for entering.
Anddy
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short, simple, and good
This is nice. Are you going to write more? It has the potential to become a good short story. Makes me want to know what happened to make him feel guilty. Good job thank you for entering it into the contest.
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