“The Heartbreaking Sepulcher”

“The Heartbreaking Sepulcher”

† The black caged gateway

That was guarded with angels holding swords and lances

Protected with shields and Kevlar

With tiaras on their heads

Guarding the spirits within

Ensuring their calm sleep

And allowing them to rest in heavenly peace

While few paces ahead

The fragrant incense rose up into the air

Spreading its amiable odor all over

† Inside the gate

A wide pavement offered a clam entrance

While the sound of the weeping wailing mourning women

Disturbed the silence

And spasmodically distorted the payers

Those were being held for the calmness of the souls

Along with the candle lights

That offered ascending stairways

Along which prayers climbed up to heaven

Where the goners could hear and feel happy

† Tombs chambers all aligned beside one another

To commemorate the death

Some were made of marble others of limestone

Some were decorated by torches

Others by trees and flowers

But among all one unique glittering vivid tomb

Sparkled among all the others

High like a castle

It was like a candy shop

Or yet doll teddy bear shop

With lots of gifts and gadgets

Dated with: B: 28/12/2003 and D: 14/02/2004

A sweet baby girl who had died before witnessing the light of day

After 2 months of coma

She had departed life

† Her tomb explained it all

Decorated with dolls teddy bears kittens and puppies

Green trees baby Barbie dolls huge cuddling cubs

Hearts pillows shaped like hearts

And a box that was written on it

Instead of crying put some candy

Candles were colored with bright colors

The sand was pink

The tomb was crowned with angels holding golden combs

And a picture of her crypt as displayed

As small as a shoe box

Snow white and bright

With a cross on its surface

Interior made of candy and cotton candy

The cap gilded with cartoon characters

Mickey Mouse and Looney characters

† On the right a huge limestone had an agonizing story

It began with a happy beginning

Birth of my child for years I had pleaded

To have child but I wasn’t able to

But many years later GOD gifted me a girl

A sweet lovely daughter

With green emerald eyes

Blinking eyes that tattered those eyelashes

Waving like leaves under the breeze

My girl was so alright and healthy

As strong as an ox

But time had changed so fast

We celebrated our Christmas with the most blissful happiness

Glorified with this gift that we had

† 2 months later it was valentines day

My husband and I were out having a romantic dinner

While my sister was at home baby sitting our only child

She was asleep like an angel

Dreaming with the cherubs

Jumping over the fences of paradise

Like the lambs crossing the meadows

Over the white clouds

Until the last step she tripped

And fell a hard fall

As she opened her eyes

Awakened from her sleep

And held her little teddy

At the same instance

She had an heart attack

And chocked to death

† It was a happy night for us

In the floating city of Venice over the calm bridge

Then a long trip on board a gondola with a hanging lantern

While we embraced each other tightly

Aware of the melancholic tragedy that happened back at home

As they came at midnight

Weeps and sobs had flooded the house

The room was decorated with roses

Her 2 month child had passed away

As soon as I entered the room

My eyes got blind I had a serious shock

I lost my control felt dizzy and became blind

But I asked my husband to have a happy burial ceremony

And have the best home for my baby’s corpse

With the most vivid decorations

† Years passed much like 2

Her health tarnished

She became amputated

She had a heart attack and passed away

And joined my child to nurture her up in the heavens

And I provided my baby with toys dolls teddies

To let her be ever happy and enjoy the beauty of heavens

I wish I could see her smiling one last time in front of my eyes

But it’s hard though I know she is seeing me

Alone at home in my dark room

And sending me the glimpse of light with the moonlight

………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………

ON: Thursday, April 20, 2006

At: 5:03:32 PM

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  • asthray.heart
    May 24, 2007
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    commented already

  • belowit
    May 23, 2007

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    This is great, pete. I couldn't stop reading. I wish I could give you a helpful comment, but I couldn't find anything wrong.
    ~belowit


  • LostShadow silver member
    May 2, 2007
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    Commented already well done again and goodluck in the contest.

    Em


  • asthray.heart
    April 14, 2007
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    Hav already commented babe


  • Taylor Renee
    April 13, 2007

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    wow this was terrific but really sad. you did a terrific job on the writing part, but the plot line was fabulous too.
    ummm i was a lil bit confused at the beginning...i think this would be really cool to put into a book...like you know...put it as prolouge or something? oh idk!
    great job the way it is!!! terrific!
    (sorry im really bad at commenting)
    im taylor btw.
    keep it up!
    xoxo
    TAy


  • Blackwings
    April 13, 2007

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    That was sad I wanted to cry. I really could imagine a little girl dieing. Nicely done and good luck in the contest!!!!

  • asthray.heart
    April 10, 2007

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    Peter this was sad, I hope no such thing as this has happened to you before. It would be shattering if it has.
    The imagery was nice and the flow was well, the beginning was good but I dont know what it hads to with the rest.(sorry)

    Good luck in the comp and wish you well my dear.

    ~Ebb


  • LostShadow silver member
    April 10, 2007
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    this is very well done, great flow. sad but good.

    Well done

    Em

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