The Heartbreaking Sepulcher
The black caged gateway
That was guarded with angels holding swords and lances
Protected with shields and Kevlar
With tiaras on their heads
Guarding the spirits within
Ensuring their calm sleep
And allowing them to rest in heavenly peace
While few paces ahead
The fragrant incense rose up into the air
Spreading its amiable odor all over
Inside the gate
A wide pavement offered a clam entrance
While the sound of the weeping wailing mourning women
Disturbed the silence
And spasmodically distorted the payers
Those were being held for the calmness of the souls
Along with the candle lights
That offered ascending stairways
Along which prayers climbed up to heaven
Where the goners could hear and feel happy
Tombs chambers all aligned beside one another
To commemorate the death
Some were made of marble others of limestone
Some were decorated by torches
Others by trees and flowers
But among all one unique glittering vivid tomb
Sparkled among all the others
High like a castle
It was like a candy shop
Or yet doll teddy bear shop
With lots of gifts and gadgets
Dated with: B: 28/12/2003 and D: 14/02/2004
A sweet baby girl who had died before witnessing the light of day
After 2 months of coma
She had departed life
Her tomb explained it all
Decorated with dolls teddy bears kittens and puppies
Green trees baby Barbie dolls huge cuddling cubs
Hearts pillows shaped like hearts
And a box that was written on it
Instead of crying put some candy
Candles were colored with bright colors
The sand was pink
The tomb was crowned with angels holding golden combs
And a picture of her crypt as displayed
As small as a shoe box
Snow white and bright
With a cross on its surface
Interior made of candy and cotton candy
The cap gilded with cartoon characters
Mickey Mouse and Looney characters
On the right a huge limestone had an agonizing story
It began with a happy beginning
Birth of my child for years I had pleaded
To have child but I wasnt able to
But many years later GOD gifted me a girl
A sweet lovely daughter
With green emerald eyes
Blinking eyes that tattered those eyelashes
Waving like leaves under the breeze
My girl was so alright and healthy
As strong as an ox
But time had changed so fast
We celebrated our Christmas with the most blissful happiness
Glorified with this gift that we had
2 months later it was valentines day
My husband and I were out having a romantic dinner
While my sister was at home baby sitting our only child
She was asleep like an angel
Dreaming with the cherubs
Jumping over the fences of paradise
Like the lambs crossing the meadows
Over the white clouds
Until the last step she tripped
And fell a hard fall
As she opened her eyes
Awakened from her sleep
And held her little teddy
At the same instance
She had an heart attack
And chocked to death
It was a happy night for us
In the floating city of Venice over the calm bridge
Then a long trip on board a gondola with a hanging lantern
While we embraced each other tightly
Aware of the melancholic tragedy that happened back at home
As they came at midnight
Weeps and sobs had flooded the house
The room was decorated with roses
Her 2 month child had passed away
As soon as I entered the room
My eyes got blind I had a serious shock
I lost my control felt dizzy and became blind
But I asked my husband to have a happy burial ceremony
And have the best home for my babys corpse
With the most vivid decorations
Years passed much like 2
Her health tarnished
She became amputated
She had a heart attack and passed away
And joined my child to nurture her up in the heavens
And I provided my baby with toys dolls teddies
To let her be ever happy and enjoy the beauty of heavens
I wish I could see her smiling one last time in front of my eyes
But its hard though I know she is seeing me
Alone at home in my dark room
And sending me the glimpse of light with the moonlight
ON: Thursday, April 20, 2006
At: 5:03:32 PM
Author notes
:'(
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Comments
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This is great, pete. I couldn't stop reading. I wish I could give you a helpful comment, but I couldn't find anything wrong.
~belowit

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well done again and goodluck in the contest.
Em
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Hav already commented babe
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wow this was terrific but really sad. you did a terrific job on the writing part, but the plot line was fabulous too.
ummm i was a lil bit confused at the beginning...i think this would be really cool to put into a book...like you know...put it as prolouge or something? oh idk!
great job the way it is!!! terrific!
(sorry im really bad at commenting)
im taylor btw.
keep it up!
xoxo
TAy

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That was sad I wanted to cry. I really could imagine a little girl dieing. Nicely done and good luck in the contest!!!!
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Peter this was sad, I hope no such thing as this has happened to you before. It would be shattering if it has.
The imagery was nice and the flow was well, the beginning was good but I dont know what it hads to with the rest.(sorry)
Good luck in the comp and wish you well my dear.
~Ebb
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this is very well done, great flow. sad but good.
Well done
Em
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