Why does life treat me this way? What did I ever do to deserve this eternal unhappiness. Death defines my life and it is that which disturbs my soul. Maybe if I died and passed into the land of the forbidden happiness then I would no longer suffer this torment in my life. Death is the ultimate reward to take away the pain of living a life of dying slowly from my miserable life. I cut my arm with a knife last night because I can't take the away the feeling of death in my dead life any other way. I cut deep and the blood was so red that it reminded me of death and my life which also reminded me of death. Death. Life. What is the difference? My life is dead to me so maybe if I die I will become more alive. Maybe next time I will cut deeper and the crimson blood will flow into my soul and drown the terrors that haunt my life. When I die my dead life will be complete and maybe then the pain of my life will die with me. I must free my dead soul from the land of death by killing what keeps it locked in this black prison. My life. I feel nothing but death in this life of mine. Soon I will feel death in my death when I choose to bring death to my dead life and soul. When I free myself from this pain I will be truly happy for the first time since the darkness swallowed my soul. Or maybe I'll just go eat something. Maybe some Taco Bell.
A contest entry
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Lol commented ths one
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I can't help but laugh when some people don't spot the comedy. Perhaps I was too good at writing this?
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Haha, this had twisted humor to it. I loved it.lol.
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LOL
Taco Bell...that's the best part!!! Obviously this was meant to have the shocker at the end and of course I found it redundant throughout. However, I think that's the point... the randomness of death of dying of using those types of words. Very interesting stuff. Nicely done!beginning: 2, language: 2, ending: 5.
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I am assuming this was sarcasm, so kudos to you!!
I liked it =]
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Very good and nice use of the word death, very emotional.
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Taco Bell
It was all serious and about cool death words! Then it sounded like my emo friend who says she wants to kill herself then all of a sudden she asks a compleatly random question. I loved how it was put together. It flowed Into a nice smooth rythem. It was funny too! I love randomness in stories. Especialy in ones thatfit yours so nicely. Great read and good job.
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wow....i love taco bell!
truely a paradoy worthy of recognition! i think that i'll go though next time and see how many times you actually used the word death....thanks for the entry and good luck!
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