This feeling inside me makes me quake-
I was wrong about you; I made a mistake.
There is no one else to whom I can confide,
and share this feeling that's bottled inside.
It makes me crazy; almost out of control,
burning a hole into my very soul.
I just can't help but love you; that's a fact,
and that is why I must ask for you back.
Author notes
I wrote this poem for a friend-not for me. I haven't really had any experience in this field yet...
A contest entry
- Short Shorts by Delfishie.
175 points, ended April 7, 2007, 15 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - I WILL READ ANYTHING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! by Vietbabe909.
350 points, ended April 24, 2007, 72 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Anything they feel like saying.
Comments
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interesting...
i hoped for a story...i do get poems though. anyways i like the poem, it rhymes and has a meaning to it. thank you for entering my contest...good job! -
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Sorry about the poem. I discovered allpoetry, so that's where all my stuff is now.
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rhyme-tastic
You totally get props for writing a rhyming poem. I get so sick of free form poetry and yet, that's all that's out there pretty much. So hurrah for you for taking a chance on this style of poetry.
This doesn't qualify for my contest because it's a poem and not a story, but I still enjoyed reading it.
Good job. -
Good
I really liked how you threw in your emotions and made me feel with you. Some writers forget to do that completely. The flow was very good. I really enjoyed it.
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