(How this came to be)1
I have been tracking Double Edge for 2 years2
He is ruthless 3
And has killed five world leaders4
I last picked up on his trail 3 days ago5
When a mad man named Fox hired him to take out some of his compaction6
I traced one of his transmissions back to his strong hold7
(He is mine)8
I am armed with three 9mm Specials two in back holsters and one in my jacket9
A shotgun strapped on my leg10
And how ironic A double-edged sword sharpened to a 1in.11
(Lets get started)12
With my shotgun I take out his front gate guards. As I enter his strong hold I use my sword to swiftly take out the rest of his hired thugs. I slowly make my way down the main hall to his control room. I blow a hole in the wall with 2 of my 9mm ready. I take cover as bullets start to fly. Give up Double edge I fire back. I take a hit to the shoulder and have to reload one of my guns. He can see I am hurt and moves in to take me out. (Double Edge) Now you fool after all these years of being a thorn in my side I am ride of you. (Sector) I throw a smoke grenade and disarm him as I run I use my 2last bullets shooting into the smoke I hear him drop. When the smoke all clears I see him lying in a pool of blood with one shoot to the head and another in the arm.13
(It is all said and done)14
The end15
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SHarp...pulp smooth!
This is a really well put together snapshot. For such a short piece it has it all...the beginning sets up the concluding action nicely and makes the reader fell as though they have experienced with the characture the final lethal moments...well done! -
AWESOME!
OK! I give up!! How do you do it? Not only are you an amazing and gifted poet, but I now discover that you are a natural born story-teller! I'm MOST impressed by this one! (And I've not even begun getting into them all!) Amazing! I'm astonished! (And in a great way!
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wow...that was realli cool, it was a lil hard to read because of the background, but cowboy bebop is great, so i let it slide...this poem really drew me in and kept me interested the whole time, great write i loved it...this is def. my kinda story....well done
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Hehehehehe kewl write. Very descriptive... I liked the scene reminded me of one that I played in 007 for ps2. I look forward to the next one on the list of your chartoon.
God Bless you,
With Love,
Jenna
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niiiiiice! Man, you just keep getting better and better... this was really well written and kept me attentive(very exciting).. now, since I'm a little pestty bitch, or fat fuck (just cause that makes me laugh) I have an idea.. I'm a big fan of ironic endings, so heres my idea. Instead of him killing the bad guy, as assumed by the reader and Sector(?), he accidently kills his partner.. or his friend... or his pet dog! lol anyways, you should make it like he kills someone else and then D.E. shoots him... you know, thats not a very good idea, so go ahaid and scratch it Good write!
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don't touch it!
A great story...please tell me you plan to turn these into novels!!!!! I think you'd make a fantastic novelist, it seems you have a lot of great ideas and plots in your head...great writing!!!! -
excellent
Again, another interesting tale. Took me on a journey!
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don't touch it!
I loved thes story!!! great job! -
don't touch it!
hmm...interesting...lol it's awesome, very good description and all that stuff...hehehe, great job
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excellent
Wow......maybe storytelling will be your newcalling.lol.......great write though...very descriptive lovely story.....maybe you can make this into a longer one, What do you think?
((((((((((huggies)))))))))))))))
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Much better than mine.........more violence in it for one thing!
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excellent
Interesting story Sector. Kept my interest from beginning to end. This might be a new forum for you. Storytelling...Desiree -
don't touch it!
wow, awesome story very describtive, loving it.
love me,
taintedbylust
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