The scarest thing in my life is my own imagination/dream, i can totally swear i saw a shadowy-thingy with blood shot eyes with the whitest, sharpest, and pointiest teeth ever. I even saw a the grudge and ring girl murphed into each other in my shower, they had the scarest red glowing eyes ever, even they were coming out of the shower and had the freakishly ugly grubby hands coming after me, i was so freaked i went in my bed (yes im a bed wetter) but nothing compares to anything to the face geez had a m.j. nose and a black missing teeth mouth and the eyes were coming out of the mouth of the ugly girl(s). Wow! Typing this little-mini story is giving me images. Thats the scarest thing to me.
A contest entry
- Horror Movie Fan Fiction by Drac.
170 points, ended April 29, 2007, 9 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Scare Me, Woo Me by hey incendiary.
1225 points, ended October 3, 2007, 18 entries
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... what in the hell? Murphed? Bedwetter? Freaked? What happened to the bloody punctuation and capitalization? My... God. It's a travesty against literature
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Ah,
Our imaginations are the craziest things aren't they? Sometimes they make things worse than they really are. And they make things real that aren't really. I think, just like a lot of people seem to have, that you could elaborate a little more [I bet you hate that word now
] on this short story. Tell us how you felt, other than scared. Tell us exactly what was going through your mind. Were you thinking of running? Did you want to scream? Did you shut your eyes because you thought it was an illusion.
Otherwise, I think this has potential. Just work on it
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This was good. Not bad, I guess our imaginations tend to run away with us sometimes eh? It was pretty good, but I do agree with Andrew and travis, you should elaborate a bit more, make it more captivating, and run it through spell check.
It has great potential, just needs a bit of polishing, and I'm sure it would be even better! Good luck!
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Ellaborate! As others have said before, the idea is good, but it would be great if you would expand upon this. Show us your fear! Come on, buddy...
As it is, the story needs some polishing up. If you have a word proccesor, simply run it through a spell check.
Good luck in the contest, and congrats on being nominated. -
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Err..Andrew? He wasn't nominated *_*
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like others said, i'd elaborate more. you could make this story really creepy. you've got some good ideas in here.
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Hehe, I must agree, sometimes it's our own imagination that's the scariest
But it's good writing it down
Good luck in my contest
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lol this is good i agree with my friend soda good job short and sweet i like short storys
and i can see you like to write short things so i will be keeping up on your storysyou should add more to this i really was not feeling much emtion here or detail but the ideawas good tho i would like to see you add more to this really because it is a great start for a wonderful storygood job and god bless..
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Hi. This is a nice short attempt to write a horror story. But quite honestly.. I think you could try to ellaborate on this fear, the emotions, when you saw this scary thing and what had been happening when you saw the grudge/the ring girl I feel that you WOULD be able to tell us and SHOW us just how scared you were if you expound on this story
If and when you do create a shorter version of this tale, I'd love to read
Thanks for sharing this and welcome to StoryWrite
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DrBoomBoom
So tell us more about those images. Make us see the shadow thingy. I know what you mean, sometimes my stories scare me too.
beginning: 4, language: 2, ending: 3, dialog: 2.
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