As the moon will shield
the light rays will harm
excruciating pain
As the dark holds our souls,
we will be comforted
by the dark hand
We will feel washed away
by the silvery waves of black
and sink under them
in despair
But the hand will lift us
make us willing
in favour
But it is the end
as they discover
in mortality
For they will make death
the wanted
rather than suffer
the longing
the unbearable pain
the unquenching thirst
the unyielding hunger
will make death
a better place
As death takes them
they will feel peace
at last
Their souls are taken.
A contest entry
- Another all poems (I love poems) by jtnbuck.
125 points, ended April 16, 2007, 16 entries
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wow. this was very good. great ending.
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This was amazing. Very touching and spiritual. The images brought a good view to Withcery and Black Magic.
Thanks for entering and good luck
Lady Madeline.
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well
well... I dont know this kinda doesn't do with cutting -
wow very nice i liked this alot i just loved this good job and good luck in my contest god bless
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oh my god this was just great good job i liked reading this just because it was like wow good job and god bless good luck in my contest and god bless!!!
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Thanks
For commenting everyone!!! It is appreciated.
My Mum thinks that I am extremely depressed or something because she keeps asking me whether I am Ok or not. She thinks I am really depressed. H A HA HA HA HA.
Thanks again. See you on storywrite.
Elementalwolf -
This was very pretty. I liked the way it was worded and it flowed really well. It was beautiful i really like it! *claps*
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Very Good!!!
I love the ending. It was.
really...Sacrid
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interesting
so, this is a dark poem? thats cool, the normally are about the exact opposite. i like this onebeginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 2.
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