It’s our place.
It’s all ours, sweetheart, I promise. I’m going to give you the world; I’ll give you everything. I’ll give you the traffic, the people in the rain, the footsteps on wet pavements.
You’ll tell me you don’t want anything except for this moment, for this one second where everything is simple, everyone is perfect, all the sounds of the afternoon merging together into one blissful cacophony of rain falling on umbrellas, shoes on cement.
We sit on a bench opposite the theatre, our theatre, watching the people hurry past, not stopping to notice the beauty of the raindrops collecting on car windows or glisten of the ground beneath them. I hold your hand, tight in mine. Your fingers feel stiff and cold, but you tell me you’re fine. I hold them anyway.
Every so often I catch you looking away, and I murmur your name softly, or press a kiss on your cheek, trying to bring you back down without letting you fall. And you will turn and smile to me, apologise with your eyes for leaving and the cycle of noises, sights and faraway looks will start again.
“Let’s run away,” you said to me once, your eyes lighting up with the promises of what we’d do. “Let’s get away, live in the desert of Death Valley for a week, beg on the streets of Las Vegas and work middle-aged men for their jackpot winnings, spend hours on end in Central Park. Let’s do everything we’ve ever wanted to.”
And I just smiled, and said, “but I have everything here. We can go anywhere, and I’ll probably be happy.”
At the time, it seemed true. Today, it seemed truer. Because we’re just the water destroying the businesswomen’s oh-so-perfect hair, the shine on their brand new shoes, the letters falling off the matinee sign showing the true decadence of life. In this moment, we are everything. We are everyone.
Author notes
option three, http://www.johnrosenthal.com/gallery-lg-htm/gallery-archiv-Matinee.htm
A contest entry
- Options by Mel-the-Believer.
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It was like being spoon fed yout favorite ice cream with a blind fold on-
You're not sure where it's coming from, and you're surprised it's so sweet- but you don't ever want it to stop!
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True passion ~ This is what I meant! Beautiful job, lovely!
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Simply breathtaking piece that is. I love how you got so much emotion into such a short piece and again without actually mentioning any of them. Your simple description let slip more than they seem.
They say that a picture paints a thousand words, but it seemed that each of your sentences painted a gallery of pictures, perfectly.
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Ok, I'm not going to praise you... Ok, maybe just a little bit! This was absolutely breath-taking! I looooved it! My favourite part was the whole last paragraph. The imagery was excellent! For such a short piece you were able to capture the emotion and images really well! This deserves clappy men!
♥NewGuy90
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I loved this. I agree with Manic Black completely. She said (In case you forgot )
Oh, I liked this a lot.
It's very different from most of what I've read of your writings today. It's not better or worse, just sort of refreshing. I think you did a wonderful job.
In a way, it was beautiful. I love pieces that seem sort of anonymous. Sometimes I'm just sick of characters. I want the images, the emotions. No storyline, no problem, no plot. A vacation of sorts. Brilliant.
She was right
I loved this, and it was so pretty
Great job on this, and thanks so much for entering my contest!
xoxo
tay
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I looooooooooooooooved it!!!!!!!!!!!! It's so...soo....soo....great!!!! *kills my notes for never telling me about it being posted* My notes must be broken. Great job!!!
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wah... omg, so pretty, Omega
I've read two of your works the past 24 hours and.. you seem like a woman in love 
Like the previous one I've read of yours, I like this for its brevity - despite its length, you were able to tell a complete story... I long to be part of the couple here and.. wah, I feel warm all over ^_^
Thank you for sharing this, Meggers!
for the picture thing you did well, methinks
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in love with the idea of being in love, perhaps.
thanks for your comment, sodiezz.
meggxx
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This was good. I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for entering the contest. Good luck. God Bless!
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I enjoyed reading this story. Good job with this.
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Oh, I really liked this.
Ha, as I was reading this I got an idea for a new story.
Weird...x.x
This was good though, another short and sweet story.
I liked reading this though...the ned made me smile.
Very good!!
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